All Comments on 'A Wider Sky Ch. 05'

TB, i liked the original opening of the first chapter. The only reason I could see for you to re-organize the structure, is if you feel the need to add in missing information?

Interesting confrontations, overt and subtle, in this chapter. More questions, more clues, you're feeding my addiction for mysterious.

It's your story. Don't drift in the wind and allow the readers to influence you.

I am so happy i stumbled onto your story. Bravo, this story seems like its going to keep me occupied for nights to come. I adore your work. This story gives us a whole new world. I like that you put history and depth behind the plot. I'm hooked.

I'm enjoying the world you've built, but the chapters are way too short. Nothing of any consequence happens in them. I'm going to keep reading, but I feel like the best thing you could do to improve the story is increase the chapter lengths by at least threefold.

I do think the first two chapters seem out of order. it was bothersome to me reading it. I agree you should switch them back.

I assume English is not your native language as many of your expressions are quite strange. However I like the underlying story and you capture the strangeness of a radically changed world well.