All Comments on 'Abduction'

Outstanding, can't wait for more. Wish it was longer though. A great story that went too fast, but I guess that's a sign of a great story,huh.

Why, oh why, are exact bra sizes such an integral part of a story???? What is the importance to the story that one girl is a 34C and another is a 36C? Sheesh!

and hello? what about nipple play? why is a story about women leaving out nipple play? I would have given a much higher rating if it had.

. . . what you need to do is use the very good Volunteer Editor programme this site affords aspiring writers.

The characters in this story, as well as in another I have readcould be fleshed out to make the story more credible, not just a sleazy fuck tale.

And of course, the commentator who said do we need stats was very right. Metaphoric comparisons, for instance, apples, oranges, melons could convey sizes in a much more efficient way. The same for the strap-ons . . .

Yes, I wished it had been longer. Yes, nipple-play would have been a nice touch.. But, there is nothing wrong with mentioning cup size. It is more descriptive than saying "large", "small", or "medium." Why do so many people get offended by it? Good write.

The story and the characters needed to be fleshed out. If I were you, I would revise the story. The premise is good, but there are a thousand straightforward and simple fuck tales on this site, make yours stand out.

I loved this story. Please continue it.

God this was so fucking hot i came so many times and my vibrator got soaked! Keep the good work cumming

a little patience

stories along these lines are great!

this time you just seemed to rush things a bit

your a fine writer but slow down

work on a build up

then boom knock folks socks off

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