All Comments on 'Ada's Night Out'

I don't recognize the characters so I can't speak to that aspect of it (celebrities - these people exist in TV/Movies/literatire, right?) I noticed some comma splicing, (my own personal demon since high school) more near the front than later in the piece. I thought some of the bits where she talks to herself were perhaps a bit too formal and unrealistic....but how the hell do I know how somebody else talks to themselves?

Very good for a first submission. I suggest you use the volunteer editors - they are very good.

PS - hella great tattoo!