All Comments on 'Against Her Will'

Have her come home so you could clean her up

Love to do cleanup

I mean really. That was horrible. Poorly conceived plot and worse execution. I don't know who was dumber the wife or the men. Was the dialogue written by a three-year old?

that is insulting to every black person alice, not to mention you made the woman a total bimbo... I gagged when I read this... it was THAT bad

Love it, hope you write more

I'm sorry you people didn't like the story. I loved it. I wanted to fuck her myself I like them 40-50 year olds they know how to fuck!!!

Love your stories!

ok , to be generous in the comment .. this concept is interesting.

but the plot needs ALOT of work ,at best you have the Outline of a plot ,

and to be honest it needs much work , you have the housewife not query the credit cards decline .. you also have her offer her phone as part of the payment .. yet she des not even think to call someone for help in getting the cash to pay for the work.

Any reader with 1/2 a functioning brain will lose interest at that point.

the dialogue is stunted & does not draw the reader into the story ..

in my opinion you have a great idea , but what you have posted is really no more than a rough outline of the story .

with some reflection & some time spent on expanding & developing your plot , you could have had a 4 star plus score.

as things stand , i think you have been remarkably lucky to score over 2.5 for this.

it does not merit a 3 star vote .

TwistedOliver.

She really deserved it. It`s a good story but it could have been longer. She should have been forced to work as a whore every evening. She would have get used to it in no time. Krista

This was spoiled by poor writing.

I like the storyline . It includes one of the fantasies I have had and one in which I was almost forced into when my car broke down in a small town.

Story that would only appeal to obese old man with limp dick.

Very intriguing subject matter. I enjoyed your enthusiasm for the idea but was pushed out of the story constantly by the fragmented writing. Details…

Build out your characters, set the scenes and help your readers visualize. Thanks for the offering keep writing.