All Comments on 'Amber'

Very predictable very boring yawn

overall not bad

Yeah. A twist ending only works if the readers don't see it coming. Because of the category it was apparent he was some relative. I guess the argument would be it's a reveal and not a twist, but even then it's not much of a reveal.

B/c you didn't let us know who they were to each other it made it boring. You didn't know their connection so I couldn't feel a connection. Yes I knew they were related but not the exact relationship. Your twist backfired for me & just made it boring

The relationship is revealed at the end??? Crappola!!!

Good job. I wondered if this was your direction. Is this just a one off or is more on the way?

Really? How could anyone "wonder" about the direction? It was obvious from the start.

I don't do D/d, it's sick