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AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

Story seems rushed, had potential although a few to many "&"'s ruins the flow imo.

cumnchatcumnchatover 6 years agoAuthor
First submission

AS this was my first ever submission it was bound to have flaws so I accept any criticism the use of' '&' instead of 'and is something I will remember and work on. I do hope that readers will return to any future submissions and enjoy them.

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