All Comments on 'Art in Reality Ch. 01: A New Beginning'

What a promising start. Two lovely characters and an idyllic Cornish backdrop.

More please. Southmead said it best,

NothPacific

What a treat to find a good story line written in a literary way. It's great to find someone who understands the importance of good grammar in holding the reader's attention. Too many efforts on Literotica.com are anything but literary.

Literotica, being the Land of Fantasy, is the perfect home for an extraordinarily unlikely coincidental story like this. There are a number of avenues for this to proceed, but we can all hope that there will be additional chapters. I usually feel that a story that has such a good is best left to the reader to fantasize the continuance and the ending, but I would like to see what the author can do with this. There are many mysteries still to be uncovered, not the least of which is the fact that we have a very attractive woman all alone, sexually active (the contraceptive injection), having lots of free time and open to a relationship with an older man (we don't know how much older). I can work out additional plot lines myself, but I'd like to see how Clowell handles it. It's a tough act to follow. 5*

I have to agree with the previous comment, there's plenty of space and unknowns for you to drum up a sequel. (A jealous boyfriend? His 'disturbed' ex- girlfriend? etc. etc.)

By the way - did he ever get his car out of the ditch?

Well done - more please

VBR

19pvc44

Simply charming.

A charming story beautifully crafted. More please - but no more "gotten"s!

Great story but just seems unfinished. Definitely needs another chapter.

But I think chocolate ice cream would be normal eating it from your bowels.

I very much liked your original "Art in Reality", hence I certainly appreciate this story to continue :-)

pq

Delicious! Simply delicious!

You actually wrote something nice for a change.