All Comments on 'As Close As You Can Get'

by JoelTorrid

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GiGi0405GiGi0405over 9 years ago
Impressed

I enjoyed this story. Very hot. Hope you deliver a part 2. I would love to see what happens next.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Very Nice Start

Excellent debut story

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
near wrecked

The story was nearly wrecked when the author used "coming" rather than the proper slang of "cumming" for an orgasm, also likely used "come" when it should have been "cum" for semen/orgasm/etc. which indicates an author lacking in knowledge of his topic.

AverygoodlayAverygoodlayover 9 years ago
Great story

Loved it, can't wait for the next chapter

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
This one demands a follow up chapter or 4

Absolutely have to feed all the hunger you've brought out with this one

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
RE: near wrecked

You are obviously very young and ignorant, the writer's terminology is correct and not the juvenile bullshit which you are suggesting is correct.

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