All Comments on 'Ashley Ch. 02'

You could go a long ways in life as a romance story writer. You don't jump right into kinky sex, you know how to work details, and make the story so alive, a person can feel like they're part of it. Consider writing as a career. You don't need any more practice...GO FOR IT!

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As outstanding as the first. Can't wait for Ch. 3!

Both chapters have been excellent. You've done an outstanding job of capturing some pretty intense emotions.

This is the best brother/sister story I have read here. The romance is wonderful and has you hoping everything will work out for them. I look forward to the next chapter.

One of the best stories that I've read. Take your time and don't rush, I think your on a roll.

When are they going to consumate their love? Oh yeah...this is a series. Maybe next chapter? I sense a real surprise coming. Like maybe they get busted finally and Mom and/or Dad give up a personal secret of their own? Like they've known all along. The possiblities boggle...

The perfect blend of romance, passion and suspense. Technically not much has happened, yet it's still hotter than 99.9% of any other stories I've read.

Whatever you've been doin so far, don't stop as it's working great.

Seriously, steam just sizzles off every page. Fantastic!

You have written roughly a 20 page erotic story (so far) in LITEROTICA and managed to prevent the characters from fucking each other to death, with 50 blow jobs, 12 and 1/2 anal penetrations, 77 vagina pentrations, by at least 3 big brothers who just left the gym and have not taken showers, with the nice white brother smilingly taking pictures from the back? <p>

What kind of an abnormal author are you?

I would have voted a six for the romance and build up, but this story needs to be completed. So far it has been wonderful, but PLEASE continue!

This is honestly the best story I've read on Literotica!! Please hurry with the next chapter, I can't wait! :)

Their parents are brother and sister? “Don't worry about it, honey. Fortunes won't always reveal themselves right away. It could be months, maybe years, before they come true. And when it comes to love... love can be totally unpredictable. You'll never know when you'll find it. Your mother and I had known each other for eight years before we learned that. If only I had that fortune when we were in high school. Would've saved us a lot of time and humiliation in college."

Ashley asked curiously, "Humiliation? What do you mean by-"

"Your father doesn't mean anything by it," mom interrupted. "Am I right?"

Dad almost choked on his cookie. "Erm , yes, nothing. It was nothing." His face turned bright red as the two women started laughing.

You have written a great story full of love between a brother and sister. This story much continue. Wow, I can't wait to read the rest of it. Thanks for sharing your talents with us.

Not much more can be said after all of the positive comments but I still feel I need to say that so far this story is incredible. Don't get hasty, like I've seen in other stories and keep the current pace of their relationship. I think this story is literally one in a thousand on Literotica.

What a great reading story. It's one of the better stories on here. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work

How could you possibly right such a long story so far and not even have them fuck! Thats amazing! You are without a doubt in my mind, THE best writer on this site. PLEASE continue with the next chapter I cannot wait.

........That you are leaving all of us sitting here with hard ons without a chapter three. Putting it bluntly, he HAS to TAKE her.

Mark W

I have to agree with the other comments. This story is compelling and very well written. Please hurry up with chapter 3!!

wow! this story is amazing, cant wait to read the next chapters.

absolutely wonderful!

DO NOT change ANYTHING about your writing! The patience in your story keeps people reading, wanting to know what happens next. Your character development is excellent, makes one feel as though he's there. Incredibly sexy!

hurry with chapter 3 is all i can say about this story.

Normally I'm not at all interested into the whole "incest" scene. At all. In fact I do my best to avoid it as nothing about it in the past ever appealed to me.

But this is a fine piece of work, awkwardness aside. Keep it up.

Your writing is superb. This story has incredible depth, warmth, and romance, and is also unbelievably HOT! If only my sister could be like that...Oh, well: reality bites! That's why I'm here... [meg]

My comment remains the same as the first one, but here I'd like to add my appreciation for the irony and the sarcastic tone of some of the dialogues. You made me laugh more than once :D

You did it again, great job.

she is a real tease and not very careful about hiding thier relationship most guys would get pissed and ignore and avoid her so they wouldn't get caught try to keep it realistic and believable please

This story is great and I love how much love is in this story, also love the build up. Don't stop.

Great chapter. Loving the writing...

your story is pretty good. i must say that ashely is one of the best female charecters i've seen in a story. she's cute smart and a bit sassy. another thing is the realife connections such as the ssm reference (long live nintendo!) was genius and made me remember my own memories of that game. keep goin

What is it like to hold a girl in your arms

they're really soft and fit perfectly against u. its so comfortable, on the verge of protective now tht i think about it. but it depends. if u love her..then its the most comforting, amazing thing ever to have her lay in ur arms like tht and fall asleep with her, knowing tht when u wake up she'll be there

He is such a pussy. Nuff' said.

This story made me so wet please continue

Don't listen to the stupid anons, they're silly and don't know what they're talking about. Your stories are awesome, I can't wait to keep reading!

naive but cute.. he could take a lead tho

Best I've read on Literotica and any other site. Love it!

Best chspter/pages yet so far!

This is boring

they keep getting better

A lot of this could have been left out. Who cares about how well they golf?

I've read this chapter, indeed the entire story, previously. At that reading I believe I left only one comment. But this time I don't want to start chapter three without a brief personal note on chapter two. Specifically I want to tell you how much I appreciate the slow if inexorable progression of the shared sexual experiences. It lends the work credibility. Thank you also for treating sex as a part, albeit an important one, of the greater tale. Put differently if not crudely, thank you for writing an engaging and beautiful two handed read.

You can taste the tension

Your method of writing greatly exceeded any expectations that I had. The story was so well thought out and flowed effortlessly. The very intimate scenes, between brother and sister, were told in a manner that allowed for the greatest detail and passion. The scenario of each was very erotic and titillating. This comment is for chapter one and two. I am anxiously awaiting chapter three!

You just keep this up, you are amazing at the slow development and build up of the story. I just love this and a definite 5 stars from me.

Amazing

adorable

Another 5/5.