All Comments on 'Auction Day'

Noncon, and sad. Nothing erotica here.

Well, the author chose a rather misogenistic plot setting. OK, either love it or – no do not hate – just do not read it. But execution is less than satisfying to me. Though, the general plot line idea is not bad at all, it does merit a re-polishing. Here my 4cents :

_ If there is only one entertaining mildly erotic section (punishment scene consistent with bdsm category, dressing bet), why do we have to be bored with so many details about the drive to auction and back?

_ Why hinting about more to come (Jeannie post beating, reinvestment of auction proceeds) and then neither elaborating nor referring back to it later?

_ Yes, story is short, but so be it. My point here, it is both too long on boring details and too short on goodies (e.g. why is the car type mentioned, Maybach? If story ends anyway, why not delete the last paragraph?).

_ Overall, simply not enough fun, pun or games. Adding to might be easier and preferable than cutting to right proportions.

Miscategorizing noncon in BDSM is a pet peeve of mine. Nothing in this piece meets the criteria of safe, sane and consensual. Quality is not fantastic but but is functional and could have potential if flushed out more. Work with a volunteer editor until you have something worth posting and then repost in the noncon/reluctance category. The plot line is something that could work well there.