All Comments on 'Because You Deserve It'

The jealousy play was too negative for me, if it was play at all. The extention of name calling killed all my girl wood. All that screaming and yelling in a hotel gets you the disapproval of neighbors and management, and possibly a visit from the local constables to ensure murder is not being done. Beneath all that nonsense, you created a believable couple.

That's why it's a fantasy, and not a non-fictional account. I realise that most of this is unlikely to happen, but that's what makes imagining so much fun. Thank you for your feedback, I appreciate it.

Your story was very gripping! I couldn't stop reading, almost holding my breath at times. Wholly crow! You did a fine job describing everything.