by Oddball17
I hate playing Grammar Police but this was so badly written that it was difficult to finish. Second, the good thing about her is that she isn't his wife so it makes it easy to dump the sadistic, manipulative bitch. You never gave any reason why he would accept her torturing him. Beyond that, this was simply stupid.
I liked it, the only thing is it wasn't long enough and the ending was weak. It's always good to have a strong ending, an opening for a higher level of what you left off with.
I know some do not care at all, but many of us are put off when a story becomes difficult to read. I found the scenario exciting, but was disappointed by the poor use of language and punctuation. I did try to enjoy the story, but really was unable to.
In another vein, I was instantly put off by use of the word 'vadge'. That does not belong in anything remotely erotic in my opinion.