All Comments on 'Best. Wife. Ever. Ch. 00'

The terms and nature of their relationship are so unreal that it borders on science fiction. Normal humans don't think and behave like this. Of course its possible, but preposterous to try to portray this relationship as some slight variation from normal.

You portray two people for whom sex means everything, except that it obviously means nothing. Its just an itch they scratch, sometimes with great intensity, but signifies nothing more than satisfying a base animal appetite. Their marriage is deep and emotional and intellectual, except that it is so open and geared toward mindless physical gratification that one wonders why they bother to be married. There is no commitment, no delayed gratification, no respect for each other or their marriage. And definitely no respect for themselves.

So this devolves into some kind of bizarre polyamory fuck fest, with a Lesbian component and a cuckold component. And don't forget the BDSM spanking. When are you going to bring in the gay lover for the husband?

Just too much going on below the waist for so little going on above the shoulders. But thanks for trying.

If I read this right, Stacy is being faithful to her hubby and is not cheating. If so, you should address how she says she will entertain herself for the 2 week trip.

Seriously turdmonkey... if you don’t like these stories go stick with the gay ones you beat off to.

She fucks around with girls and will most likely fuck guys on the trip and can use his pass. As an excuse. Married to a natural born slur whore like her will never let you fully trust her . Some guys really don’t care but as great a person she could be aside from being a slut would never allow me to get in a committed relationship with her. I could be her best friend , I could fuck her whenever but I’d never be able to date or be married to her. I’m just to untrustworthy of people and jealous.

... traveling the world on business. Her travels caused her demise.. fact

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Her parents were less than impressed??? WTF? They should be glad anyone besides Hugh Hefner or a rapper was willing to date the town bike. She's like a fire hydrant that every dog in town lifts a leg on.

A professionally edited DVD of their sex? So, without asking him she filmed him having sex with her and got someone else to edit it? Yeah I'm sure the editor didn't make a copy and I'm sure it won't end up on the net by which I mean it's already on the net you twit.

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She offers, no insists he take, a hall pass. Meanwhile super slut's going to be gone two weeks but will not have sex with another man. No, she's not setting him up to get what she wants. Surely not.

OK, it's your story and your character but I'm calling bullshit. Nine times out of ten, or more, marrying a slut is NOT going to turn out well. You can write it that way if you want but it's bullshit.

In general, your writing is good and I found the sex hot. That said, I did have one problem.

This is more of a personal thing, but I think the story's a bit too unrealistic. It's a weird thing to say about erotica, which (like fiction in general) tends to be larger than life, but I still get this impression. The main character is average-looking but has a hot girlfriend and later wife, Stacy stops having sex with other men but not with other women, MC has inhuman stamina at sex even from the start of the relationship, he's the only one of her numerous partners to treat her bra carefully, and of course there's the premise of her not just being fine with, but outright ordering him to have sex with other women while she's gone. Any one or two of these would be fine on their own, but having them all in the one story tends to strain suspension of disbelief.

Disclaimer: I haven't read the rest of the series, this comment is limited to this chapter.

Monmusu_Writer,

It’s true that I wasn’t going for total realism when I sat down to write this story. I just wanted to write something fun that sort of broke away from the common norm of a wife going out and having sex with multiple men with her hisband’s approval. As to the th rest, I try to make the stories similar to the type that I would want to read.

With that being said, I do hope that you tread the rest of the chapters as they go a little more into Gabe and Stacy’s relationship as well as other things going on in their lives.

Thanks for your feedback and I enjoyed your stories that you’ve posted as well.

Will the hall pass be her get out jail free card for any dalliances she has on her trip, knowing how sexual she is, I bet she's anticipating it.

I liked the touch about the bra and can believe he's the only one to take such care, teenage/early 20's hormonal boys don't tend to think.

A good start.

a preamble to bad news awaiting, TK U MLJ LV NV

Awful tags usually mean the story is awful too. This was true to it's tags.

2/5. There's a lot of really good things about this story. The affectionate banter using derogatory words like asshole and slut are fun. I've done some of the same thing in my own stories. The clearly stated use of a safety word is good too. But even with the safe word, I found a lot of the behavior that you described was a bridge too far. I would have given you a 1, but the hall pass brought you back up to a 2.