All Comments on 'Betrayed'

5+

BodyThiefByTheBay said it all very well, 22 das ago!

From an editorial view: This work reminds me of two many novel by great and successful authors. The story build powerfully and then it suddenly ends in a few pages as if the writer in the end was in hurry to finish. The end is a bit muddled, but the story was so great, a bit can be forgiven.

The Hoary Cleric

great well done.

Pretty darn good story. I liked it a lot. One thing I noticed was a lot of spelling mistakes. I don’t usually comment on those things but there were just so many it was distracting. But still it’s a very good story. Thanks for sharing.

Hey thanks for a great story. I recommend! DerMtMan.

Great story but the end kind of spoilt it, with the telephone call.

Trish deserves all her shit.

I loved this story kept me hooked an Kate an robs relationship was meant to be an I loved Kate’s personality she will make rob happy an he deserves it

Great story, I enjoyed it very much. However, I would have stayed with Kate's company and not go back to his family's company.

Not enough Kates in the world.

Great story with the slut Trisha getting her dues!! Their respective parents were full of shit for supporting the cheaters!!

I read this every now and again just because the author is a sweetheart and my God does that boy know how to write a sex scene.

Say hi once in a while my friend. (Yeah I suck at it too)

Trisha got bit by karma As bad as it was for his parents actions They were caught in the middle as for Trisha's parents they were delusional trying to "make a silk purse out of a sow's ear" Rob & Kate get to live happy ever after 5 stars

I revisit this one often enjoying it more each time. I would have enjoyed it if the asshole and both families got a little more karma. Still and all one of my favorites and I thank you for that

Oh, man!!! How great this story is! I wanna marry Kate myself…😁

⭐⭐⭐⭐ 4 stars. I liked the story you told. But, even for a fantasy, there is too much improbability. His Ex's younger VIRGIN sister, who owns her own company, pursues him. Not bloody likely!

Great story! Hard to believe the family would all side with his Bro like that. He deserved some animosity. Good karma at the end though.

His bastard family sided with the cheating son and whore Tina....why should he ficking help them in the end....the call at the end just fucked up a good story

Family dynamics vary so much, that almost nothing could be a surprise. This is a great story. Don't just read it once. Come back to it again and again. t seems to always get better. The supposed stars are not as brilliant as once expected, and raw dimonds glitter when cut and polished by a master. 5+++

Love it. Second time of reding it.

Loved the story, well written with a great storyline. Well done... 5/5

I loved it. I also think this was my 2nd time thru with it, and still felt it was a good heart warming story. About the only thing I felt though, was that the end (epilogue) seemed rushed and short. I'd have like to have seen it stretched out a little more or maybe a part 2 with some added detail about Brad and the 6 women who are suing him for child support, and the money theft from the company. It seemed that was just glanced over at the end with no detail, other than being lightly mentioned by both Kate's mom (on how it effected Trisha), and Rob's dad (customers who either spent their money, or placed their orders). Rob agreed to do it (work for them), but only from his home in NYC for 20%.

Like I said, I loved the story, and felt it was a good heart warming story, so I gave it 5 stars. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Very well constructed story. Once I got past the less than strict application of fiction, it became a great and enjoyable story.

Magnificent a true talent in a sea of dross.

What’s not to like? A great compelling story, although I can’t believe a family would turn on a son & defend a cheating bitch & her husband—and his brother.

Still all in all a very good tale.

Bill S.

Great story!

5

Excellent !

Had a Tday invite suggestion (tongue in cheek): 'Dear Btother: sorry about the whole bangin yur wife thing. The vase to the skull probably wuz something I had coming and I'm grateful that you didn't slit my throat with the shards. Our folks woulda been short one son. Of course, them not caring which brother bedded their daughter-in-law effectively reduced their son count by one anyway. Please accept this Tday invite and note preference to dark or light meat. You'll be eating crow. Oh, I guess It's ALL dark meat. RSVP your loving brother. BTW: I'm still banging yur wife.' Of course, Kate's unexpected return made my whole speech moot. 5 stars

Anon56

Repeat read still a great piece. The character development is over the top. Characters to both love and hate.

loved it ,it showed that what you have is special .i have had 47years with the women i have from moment met ,and hope spend to my dieing day 5stars to this story fantastic

Well done.

Excellent. Loved it. I know it was just a story, but the way his family treated him after finding his brother and his wife set my teeth on edge big time. Thank goodness the writer didn't throw in another twist . 5 stars. Thanks for sharing

If only it were true

Fucked family. Where is the love for the wrong we son? Where is his support?

One fed family they cast put the wronged party. Pretty shorty parents too

Wow, the family did not want to pick sides but they did exactly that, didn't they? I guess it was OK to employ someone who had no morals? I guess that came back to bite them. Why in the world would he go back to work for them?

One of my fav's, reading this for the third time.

Ditto, One of my favorites when the good (faithful, honest, honorable) comes out on top.

I've read this several times and it never fails to entertain! Thanks!

An elaborate wish-fulfillment story for those who enjoy that sort of thing.

Very similar to A Nuclear Family. Quite a good story.

Third time reading it, still loved it! The vast majority of the LW stories here feature either a total wimp who's actions make no god damn sense, or a psychopath going full postal on the cheater. So refreshing to come back to this story once in a while!

Well written enough to reread and still enjoy even already knowing the outcome.

Second read. Well done.

I usually stay away from LW but since I’ve seen multiple comments in other stories I liked that people thought they were almost as good as this, I had to read this. The comments were not wrong. Easy 5*

Good, but a wee bit ostentatious. After reading about all that fruitily described cunnilingus, a summer peach may never taste quite the same to me again.

I would LOVE to see at least a part two of this story and see Brad totally destroyed!!!!

I don't trust anyone including my own family.

Liked your story. Finally a LW with some decent revenge. Still think the plot was too easy on the cheaters.

2 things bothered me. A-the family being upset he didn't go to the wedding of his cheating wife & cheating brother? Unrealistic.

B-you (many other writers) are to easy on cheating wives! Bringing the sister to dinner was great, but the cheating wifes only other payback was being cheated on by her next husband. She knew her husband was a cheater- DUH!!

You should read some of the stories of how brutally cheating husbands are treated. Give the wives equal treatment! In a way you treat women as inferior and weak. Oh... the poor girls just don't know what they're doing and you can't be mean to them... LOL!!

ANYWAYS liked you story!

90% of people out there. only do things for others, if it is in their best interests. I can’t tell you how many times I have been conscripted, to move/ install or fix things, for my wives friends/ co- workers.I do refrigeration work, and have done quite a few free calls for these people, One week, we were painting our house. My wife called her “ friends” , to see if any of them, would help us. They all had excuses why they could not. Being invited to go out to breakfast( dutch) Only so they could explain what they needed help with....

I could go on, but you get the point. So... The wife in this story, thought she was trading up. Somehow, the brother convinced her, he had a better “ potential”, than her current husband. That was all it took, to ruin their marriage. I totally believe, this was possible. That being said, I doubt the family would have supported them, and not the brother that was cheated on. For that reason, I gave it 4, not 5 stars. Women, as a whole, know their worth. If they think their current man isn’t the best they can do, the writing on the wall, for him to be replaced, is there. I think this story should have focused more on WHY the wife decided to switch brothers. I guarantee she knew that when discovered, they would be divorced. Even if he promised to marry her, what financial incentive was there for her? That was never explained satisfactorily. And the family’s one sided reaction, was not believable, and over the top. Fix both of these issues, and you have a solid 5.

When I grew up ( 70’s) ! it was hard to get a woman to sleep with you. They were all worried about their reputations, getting pregnant, and how this could influence their future. Today women have no qualms about sleeping with someone, they don’t even know. Order dick on an app, just like a pizza. I see a lot of women, all ages, on tic toc, lamenting the fact, that finding a good guy who will commit to them, with a job and future ( never mind marriage) is next to impossible. Ladies, you are living in a world you didn’t create. But it’s one you need to change, if you want to reverse the current situation. 5 stars.

The good guys (girls) do finish first every once in a while. Would love to see a part two, just so we can see how many kids they have. 4, 5, 6??? Don't worry about the naysayers, they are all much to into themselves.

Story

Pretty good story but it took too long for him to leave his parents Company and nest. He needed a woman to pry him loose and it makes him look weak and spineless.

In my thoughts, I hope that Rob, invited NONE of his family to his wedding!!!!

Exceptional!

Thankyou.

I loved it and gave it 5 stars. What bothered me was Rob was becoming a functional alcoholic, but nobody seemed to care enough to help him get out of the deep dark hole caused by his ex-wife and older brother except Kate and eventually his sister Janet. Kate showed her love for him, by helping him get his life back together, even though she wanted him for herself (had a crush on him). Prior to Kate showing up, Janet only seemed to check on him every now and then.Mainly because he was doing his job, while working from home.

His parents really needed to go back to parent school, as you have more than one child, you can't show "favoritism", which is exactly what they did. They picked Brad over both Janet and Rob, when they didn't back up Rob when he needed them the most. Rob could have been an asshole when they needed him at the end, but didn't, showing them (and Kate) that he was the better man. Personally I'm glad he left the family business, which showed his parents that they really needed him, since Brad was stealing from the company, and hurting everyone...employees included.

This is how it should be. It's a true matching. A man needs his woman, and a woman needs her man. A beautiful balance.

Nobody from past life gets invite to the wedding……

This is a really well written, amazing story. Check soul71's profile and you'll see it's among the elite writers, the best on the site. Great write, really well done! 5 stars!

Intriguing plot line. Needed a little more detail in final chapter.... but, all in all, I enjoyed the ride.

Great story and this coming from a man that had his heart torn out by a cheating whore by sleeping with my brother and when I tried to turn to my family for help they all turned there back on me and it took me over twenty years to dig my way out of that hole by myself and I still have yet to allow anyone back in my heart it's nice to know that in some fantasy world someone was able to find love again

I liked this story the first time I read but on my second read I have a few reservations. The premise of the story is good for he LW category but I feel way to much of the story was wasted on Kate's pondering and lusting after our MC. I could have used a bit more revenge factor against his whole family but then again our MC was too good for that to happen. I guess the story probably had more appeal to younger crowd that still gets turned on by written erotica. We mustn't lose site of the necessity to appeal to the prurient the readers in the audience. Thanks for your good stories and efforts and to any editors and proof readers.

Beautiful Story. 5 Stars

I've really enjoyed this story, and I've read 2 or 3 times now as it's that good, and one of my favorites. Whether or not it could happen in real life is another story. Sure some guys end up with the ex-wife's little sister, but most don't end up with the CEO of a multi-million dollar company. It's very well written, and contains a nice little love story in it. I gave it 5 stars.

This is the 3rd time I have read this story and it gets better every time. Keep up the good work. MtM

Good story, the most plausible part is the family all excusing one brother no matter what he does and not helping the victim brother, if the victim brother just took off he loses much more than the scum bag brother and his slut ex wife, but the family aren't interested in his pain, just appearances ideally he should sort himself out then leave at his convenience, and never see any of them again, having done it, I can tell you it's not that hard.

Third read. It gets better every time I read it. Wonderful.

You just got to love a comeback story.

n ev er happen in real life but good good ov er evil

Excellent story. My second read and I enjoyed it more this time through. I know I’m going to have to delve into soul71’s catalog of stories because there has got to be more gems in there like this one. I refuse to believe that this is a one-off. 5 stars, without doubt. And thanks,

soul73.

Still good after another read.

5 stars. One of best living well is the best revenge stories out there!

This is the third time I’ve read this. It is still a 5. What was it someone once said? “The best revenge is to live well”. Trish took care of the BTB so Rob only had to smile in satisfaction. The sex scenes are remarkably erotic. Loved it again.

Sweet and romantic, this story belongs in Romance or First Time.

There is no problem with this story, it is just that it adds much less to Loving Wives (understanding slut-wives, cuckoldry, BTB, RAAC, swinging, or sharing) than it might as an alternate, or less conventional, beginning for one of those other categories.

Really enjoyed it, Rob got a brilliant sweetie!

"my lady" WTF¿

I kept expecting something bad to happen; the the brother drugging Kate and her giving it to him, or some misunderstood hugging of strangers etc. didn’t happen. Sweet story.5*

I'VE READ IT AND LIKELY COMMENTED AT LEAST ONCE BEFORE. IT IS STILL CINCO ESTRELLAS!

An okay story. The dialogue felt a bit forced, and Kate being a CEO of a multi-million dollar company so young didn't feel believable to me. I wish we had some more of her backstory, why she loved Rob even after all these years, how she got where she was, etc.

I liked the concept and the sex buildup was different in a good way. Overall a solid, okay story.

This is my 2nd time through this wonderful story and it is just as good now as it was when I enjoyed it last time. Aside from all the things that made this such a special read such as the characters and how I could feel the emotions that were being stated, it was the Epilogue that was the final kicker that brought this story above and beyond a simple 5💫 rating which I wish were possible. Thanks for everything you put into bringing this story to life and posting it for all to enjoy. It is a gem that will continue to sparkle for years to come.

J.D.

The author knows hw to write a fantastic Romance.

I hate to pick on a 5+ story but I had one gripe: "Sure they had their fights, what couple doesn't? "

For 53 years, until a rare cancer stole my bride from me, we never had a fight. Our great love simply would not allow it.

The Hoary Cleric.

PS a great example, of plot and great character development creating a masterpiece.

My second time reading g this. Loved it.

Excellent, simple tale, cleverly told, very well done.

Excellent story. Lmaoooo if only i could of had that ending in my own life. Loved it

Read this for a 2nd time & liked it more now. Wonderful writing, story telling, & how it's handled. Most of all, happy that Rob found his true love while his ex was finding her new husband cheating on her. 5 stars Bob

Considering what his family did to him it all just got brushed under the carpet as if it never happened.

Very disappointing resolution all things considered.

"Don't make us choose between you or Brad." Only reason you'd say that is as a warning that they'd not pick him.... so much for not picking sides

Fun story but seriously, please don't write guys being "coy." I'm not misogynistic by any means, but "coy" and dudes just don't go together. Course, maybe being almost as old as dirt affects my thinking... 🤔

Was loving wife thing kinda but in away not the loving wife part came afterwards and that's assuming Kate and Rob was married

Another great story, but I do think Rob's family got off way, way to light. For the most part their betrayal was sweeped under the rug.

@sons_love I do agree with you there his family got off way to light I would have nothing to do with mine if they were to do that to me

"My don't you just look stunning," Janet said, in awe as she held Kate at arm's length. Shooting her husband a sly look as she noted how he was checking her out without appearing to do so."

Liked the implied rough byplay between Kate and the brother Brad, and especially between the sister Janet and her husband's implicit gawking at Kate. Well done and very witty. Something similar to this story dynamic went on with a friend's family business many years ago, and such byplays to occur. I knew them all well, especially the wives of whom one was my sister, and the too curious males PAID for their too obvious gawking. At least one black eye and some pointed negligence if I recall. I paid more attention to the family women than some of those did, from the matriarch on down, mostly because they were good company, but always careful to observe propriety since it was an old, popular South Atlantic coastal city. And never without my loving wife who was devoted to keeping me on the straight and narrow, and I did willingly. I was always the Northwest Coast Yankee but enjoyed that South Atlantic Southern culture, looking back decades later. Thanks for a great story!

The story is a good love story. Though I woud point out that the cheating wife part shouldn't have been ignored in the story. It is also difficult to believe that a 22 year old is running a multi million $ company that isn't a new tech company.

More a romance than a LW, but very good...

Both moving and very erotic as needed. I agree with one other comment: it's a little far-fetched to think that Kate has gone from a sewing machine to a multi-million dollar corporation by age 22! Even 32 would be a stretch!

Still, 5 stars.

I really enjoyed reading this story!

5 stars!

Why in God's name does he even deal with his family after all that?

My third reading and still enjoy it quite a bit. Should have been in Romance though. The byplay between the brother and the character Katy is good, as was the first wife Trisha's dalliance with the same brother. Could have used some development of that subplot, but just my quibble. Maybe Robbie hammering the asshole brother for handsies with his intended. https://www.literotica.com/faq/

Somehow Rob’s family an his ex ought to get a hot poker up the ass. Great read.

Ed

It’s amazing to me how some older parents think they can just boss their grown children around like they did when they were kids. It reminds me of my mother. I broke her of that habit a lot quicker than Robbie did though.

Great story, soul71, thanks for sharing.

Five stars.

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Finally a true loving wife, its so rare these days. Maybe because she had the money and didnt feel she had to get a better deal by climbing a male ladder.