All Comments on 'Big Mistake Ch. 02'

It needs too be editted badly. Hard to read

Want more!!!!

I know it is written badly please bare with me guys this is my first try also I am trying to get chapter three posted I'm glad at least some people are enjoying this

Waiting for the next one. Please be quick LOL. No, seriously, hurry up ;-)

As another commenter said, it does need to be edited a lot. Many double sentences are run together. But for a first effort, it shows promise. The other thing that would help is to make the introduction better. In the story, basically she sends him 1 email, and from that he hacks her computer, takes blackmail pictures at home and work, and convinces her to handcuff herself inside a transport box lest she lose her job from the blackmail pictures. That has the bare bones of something that could work, but as currently written it is way too abrupt and unconvincing even for a fictional story. Give it a better-written intro and fix all the run-on sentences, and this could be a very good story. That is, if the author ever decides to finish it. (The author commented "I am trying to get chapter three posted", over 3 years ago (in 2018), so I suppose the author gave up on this. Too bad.)