All Comments on 'Birthday Festivities Ch. 02'

This was great! Seriously, compared to the first chapter (which was pretty darn great in itself), you have really raised the bar. I really hope you keep on writing. I hope you continue this for another chapter - while the mom did promise (and deliver) a BJ for his birthday - I'm hoping she's willing to give him an extra special present (her sweet pussy) before the next day.

There were a couple of typos (lightly breath should be lightly breathe; completely spend should be spent) - I'm only bringing this up to help you with your later stories - I do not mean to discourage you. My advice? If possible, take a printout of your story and then go over it with a pencil, marking out any mistakes as well as opportunities for improvement. That always seems to work for me.

Keep it up Jester!

A motherly blowjob is always welcome, of course. But nothing can compare with a mom spreading her thighs and welcoming her boy back up the beautiful hairy hole he came out of. Nothing can ever feel as good to a boy's cock, as warm and loving, just so damn right, as his own mother's cunt.

Now that's stepping up the game, good job there mate!

Good job on eliminating most of the mistakes, some do remain but do not spoil the story, developing the characters and the setting, building up the excitement and of course the intimate act between mother and son was superb. What strikes me most is mothers promise of more, of course he'll have to work for it though =]

Not much to say to this but giving it 5* and wait for more.

I don't really read mom and son stories this one is very good I mean mom is start as hell and a sex cat keep this up but I got to say if you are goin to bring in the daughter no threesomes

great story I love the moms character I only have one question , is this the End? I hope not

At least from the perspective I'm reading this series, this isn't about incest, this isn't about a birthday present.

This is a femdom/cuckold story.

Maybe i'm reading too much into your foreshadowing, but I'm noticing:

All of your sexual action happens under Tom's nose.

Tom is continually portrayed as a oafish type who's allowed his participation in the rat race to turn him into a eunuch even though he comes home every night to a wife that has maintained her girlish figure and still has a strong sex drive.

Alex is continually portrayed as bewildered and kept off balance by Linda's maneuvering. There's nothing in this story about seduction as much as it is about her winning "the game"... "She smiled in appreciation of the next trap she laid that would keep her in the lead."

And Jess is introduced and then never heard from again through two chapters..

So, I don't know where you're going, and I don't *think* you're going the same direction as another incest story that well far off the rails, but if you haven't already, I suggest reading jasliz's "Being Busted Brings Benefits" and try not to have too much fun introducing unexpected twists and turns.

You're a good writer, and you've built a great story, but it's time to get more naughty. We've learned a lot, but things are moving a little slow. It's time for dad to go somewhere, then Alex and his mom can really have some hot sexual festivities.

Continue. It s an excellent story.

very nice payoff. good first series.

I loved it where's part two

I doubt there will be more, this story is at least six years old. I think the thought of his father catching them really took away from his blowjob enjoyment. Another chapter would have given Alex the ability to fuck his mom. Since she's so dominating, she owed it to Alex to give him her pussy multiple times.

I hope you continue writing this was pretty good

Absolutely awesome story!! Keep ‘em coming….

LMAO..that was one of the best endings I have read here on Literotica! You had me there for a second when she said pretty much no more after today, then she reiterated that it was no more about it all being about him after his birthday, she'd need some play too basically...I see you have a helluva imagination and you have started off your writings Extremely well on here..imma give you a 5 🌟 on both chapters! Great job and thank you for your time 👍💪👍💪😉

When the follow up coming out?

MEH!