All Comments on 'Birthday Treat'

"You were my last client of the day, and you were late"

No I wasn't.

The trouble with addressing people in stories in the second person is that you automatically exclude most of your audience. Don't tell my about my pussy! I don't have one!

It was an interesting story but it was confusing the way you addressed the characters. I think it would have been better if you just introduced the characters and then told the story from the point of view of the guy. The story would have flowed better and wouldn't have been so confusing.