All Comments on 'Black Beauty'

Didn't get past half a page. You have commas where they are not needed, none where they are, words missing, letters thrown in for no reason.

I enjoyed the story and look forward to part 2

So many typos but a good story for content for now. If you haven't submtted & want help on part 2, I'm willing. I normally don't dabble in BDSM whether to read or edit. But when the roles are playful with respect of affection leading to love, limits or clear boundaries & of course consensual, it becomes so appealing. So far your story is first class. It just needs tightening in the infrastructure. Kudos!

I have to agree, when I'm reading a fantasy about a guy saving a beautiful, sparky woman, who would do anything for him, and is my complete sexual dream-cum true, BUT the author has not submitted the proper Topper Bondage Grammar Rules, I find my self losing interest in the endless, hot, mind-bendingly kinky sex.... The only solution have her pick up some fur-lined punctuation at their next stop so he can do her rite and the Bondage Grammarians won't feel left out!

Enjoyed this, but agree editing is needed! Are we going to see more?

Was a Male's wet dream/Fantasy So ANINY the GRAMMAR Queen back off

Thanks.

What a wonderful story. Thankyou author I once met a girl from New Zealand like this ex husband etc. Thankyou for taking me down memory lane.

This is a fantastic story. I have read it many times and it never gets old. I love her personality and her piercings. Please continue!

I have enjoyed the story, please continue with it.

This could be a classic of its genre if it was edited for punctuation, grammar and spelling. I'd like to see more description of both characters' physical and emotional feelings as they are having sex; I feel this would enhance the story.

Waiting for Part 2, as are many others. I would suggest that it involve his breeding Jakie. Given her personality, this could be incredibly dramatic and erotic. I would also suggest her recruiting some other female to service her Master while she is in the late stages of pregnancy, which might lead to relationship complications resolved by his finding a master for the gal Jakie recruited. And in terms of drama, having the scumbag ex turn up again in a town where Master has connections in the casino biz could lead to a most satisfactory resolution. I would suggest castration leading to the ex killing himself in some spectacular way before Jakie and her master live happily ever after.

To bad it was never finished.

More please!!!

I hope a part 2 is coming.