All Comments on 'Black Guy Uses His Worm to Fish'

you did pretty well for first time good story idea next time flesh it out more. I hope to read more from you congrats on making the leap from reader to writer

Please take the time to edit your stories. I couldn't get past all of the miscues and grammatical mistakes in order to enjoy the story. You had numerous sentence fragments.

Thanks.

It's a good first try, butI had to downgrade this to a 4 for language. It's too bad you didn't work a little harder to learn the english language when you were in school. If you are going to write stories successfully, you will need to learn it. Whities like me sure won't study eubonics just to understand your writing when it's easier to just read another authors story.

It was a good story but it would have been better if u extended it like she gets 'punished' by her dad about being a slut and get some more black men to fuck her. Or it could have been a rape or instead just fucking her he fuckes her mom to if she found out. The ending was weak but other than that it was awsome.