All Comments on 'Blackmail in the Pacific Ch. 01'

Great start

Don't let her go easy. Keep her reluctant for a while. Humiliation...

The only bad thing is the name goes from Lucas to Jacob, gets confusing.

I think if you continue writing you will create something special. I personally would like to see more public exposure when she is forced to show held off to standard in very revealing outfits.

Brilliant story can't wait for chapter 2 and follow her humiliation, make sure she remembers to ask him to play with her cunt like him I prefer that word

Palau is not exactly in the South Pacific, and you surely won't get there from Hawaii on a small plane (check the distance on a map), but apart from that, can't wait to read more.

The build up took way too long for there to be so little action.

okay I see the complete potential in this as it progresses. I can't wait to read the next part!!!! I'm on a two hour drive with 3 other people an im.just sitting back on my phone reading this. IM SO WET. if you have a kik. message me my username is lilhorny212

Sometimes you use the name Lucas and then sometimes you use the name Lucas which is it? However I love the story so far

Is his name Lucas or Jacob?

Who is Jacob?

Hey all. So I screwed up and tried to change the email address on my original profile and ended up flummoxing the whole thing up and got locked out! Had to create a new account. It's still me, I swear. Anyway - I've kept writing and made a FB page. Come see me at Suzi Milan. Sorry for being a nimrod. : /

http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00NVSRTXO ?

"This isn't 50 fucking shades of gray."

Best line ever!

But really, great story. Well written.

I thought I loved just the story... this is even better. http://tinyurl.com/o6j9zzw

loving this.. not much coercion, more just slave activities. but I will read on with gusto.

I have only read this chpter and right from the beginning, not my sort of story man stuff I told myself, I didn't expect to read more than a few paragraps but, and a big but, you have me hooked and runny. Well written, well constructed and oh so erotic. Thank you

Elizabeth

Love the dominance and exhibitionism. My kind of story..

I do like non consent but this one just seems to make me angry so far