by Stillathisrequest
I have only read this chpter and right from the beginning, not my sort of story man stuff I told myself, I didn't expect to read more than a few paragraps but, and a big but, you have me hooked and runny. Well written, well constructed and oh so erotic. Thank you
Elizabeth
loving this.. not much coercion, more just slave activities. but I will read on with gusto.
I thought I loved just the story... this is even better. http://tinyurl.com/o6j9zzw
"This isn't 50 fucking shades of gray."
Best line ever!
But really, great story. Well written.
Hey all. So I screwed up and tried to change the email address on my original profile and ended up flummoxing the whole thing up and got locked out! Had to create a new account. It's still me, I swear. Anyway - I've kept writing and made a FB page. Come see me at Suzi Milan. Sorry for being a nimrod. : /
Sometimes you use the name Lucas and then sometimes you use the name Lucas which is it? However I love the story so far
okay I see the complete potential in this as it progresses. I can't wait to read the next part!!!! I'm on a two hour drive with 3 other people an im.just sitting back on my phone reading this. IM SO WET. if you have a kik. message me my username is lilhorny212
Palau is not exactly in the South Pacific, and you surely won't get there from Hawaii on a small plane (check the distance on a map), but apart from that, can't wait to read more.
Brilliant story can't wait for chapter 2 and follow her humiliation, make sure she remembers to ask him to play with her cunt like him I prefer that word
I think if you continue writing you will create something special. I personally would like to see more public exposure when she is forced to show held off to standard in very revealing outfits.
The only bad thing is the name goes from Lucas to Jacob, gets confusing.
Great start
Don't let her go easy. Keep her reluctant for a while. Humiliation...