All Comments on 'Blackmailed into Incest'

Some of the early syntax was unclear about the mom being the narrator's mother. I thought for a while it was a divorced ex or something like that.

While the story had some good concepts, there are still some flow problems. If you do not have an editor I would suggest getting one, not because of typos or what not but to see how the story reads.

Thank you for a good effort and this has an interesting potential for a series.

To descriptive when not important to story.

I do not know you.

All of the introductory caveat's and attempts to assuage potential readers possible misconception's of your story indicate to me you fear the reader. Just write it and those who enjoy Incest as a genre will read and provide you feedback.

For me, this has become a why bother situation.

Good Luck!

While your story has a good plot, it doesn't develop properly. You hint at all this illegal activity, yet it doesn't develop the processes enough to intrigue my interest.

Same ole, same ole ... to put it bluntly, the story is boring. You don't create enough twists to keep the reader's attention. I can understand the clinical view point of the narrator at the beginning and her changing viewpoint once she began to be excited. But the sex wasn't graphic or descriptive enough. It reminded me a lot of other stories read on this and other sites. The families willingness to plunge into incest related sex without repulsion was a little interesting, yet at the same time, they were too eager. When I fucked my wife anally for the first time, her eyes nearly bugged out of her head. In your story, anal virgins just plopped down and impaled themselves on a chosen partner, which doesn't imply virginity.

Details about clothes are good, but once we have the picture in our minds, we don't need to be reminded over and over again. If it isn't relevant to the story, leave it out.

Keep it up, you're learning.

The story was to drawn out, who cares who was wearing what in such detail. Could have been a lot better as the idea was sound but just too much detail.

you spelled shelia wrong It's I before E except after C and their is no C in SHELIA! Get it right people. you spelled it shiela.