All Comments on 'Bloodlust at Midnight'

A longer narrative could be more erotic, though this is moderately hot. The basic story was fun. Spelling looked good, but punctuation suffered, with missing commas and a concluding dangling participle forming an ugly sentence fragment. Writing talent is surfacing, but some proofing review, software grammar check, and/or editor's help would improve the result.

Hot little piece, but you often use words with a totally different meaning than intended, which really breaks the flow of the story: through/threw, an/and, process/proses, throes/throws ...

oh, and look up "animosity" - it means resentment or even hatred and has nothing to do with being animalistic.