All Comments on 'Bookworm Ch. 02'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago

I'd almost categorize this series as non-erotic till you get to the chapter that has it. I'm not against build up but the chapters are short. I would suggest perhaps waiting and making a multi-page story. Also this mystery guy has been her husband, finance, and boyfriend.

Best of luck developing your writing skills.

biercebiercealmost 9 years ago
Curious where this is going

A slow build up is cool. I am waiting for the next chapter.

Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago

"I got the vision in my head of making out with her. I would have my head tilted up, with my head basically resting on her huge boobs"... This is so freakin hot. I want this right now! ;(

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