All Comments on 'Born Into Darkness Ch. 06'

Everything about it. The characters, the situations, all of it. Please keep writing.

Thanks.

Good story and good idea but you need to work on past and present tenses. Also spell check doesn't make sure the word is correct. Steak, not stake in an early chapter. Good editing, grammer and spelling can turn a good idea into a great story! Good luck!

I think that you are doing a really good job. The story line is good, and it flows really well. I look forward to your next chapter and I can't wait to see how Sophie reacts to his secreat. ^-^

Yes I saw Lucy! Awesome! I didn't personally think it was alot of killing hut apparently it was.... idk... really good job! More! More!

This is an amazing story so far and it has great potential. Although, you need to fix the past, present and future tenses in your stories. There are also other grammatical and spelling errors but those are only minor. The main frustration is the tenses, so please fix those. Great plot line though!

A few spelling errors, it's a great story line. The story flows and transitions well with good character development. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this story.

Obviously Dean's background and the future of their relationship are key ingredients to this story, but what I like the best are the characters - they are so vivid and real! I enjoy the good-natured humor at Dean's expense, and I love Sophie's spunky character. Even the minor characters like Maria and Jose, Mandy, Aaron and their kids, and Kell are well-developed with interesting, unique personalities.

I am a bit surprised that a guy would name his dog "Munchy" as that feels more like a name a girl would choose, and it took awhile for me to get into the story because I kept seeing the actor who plays Dean Winchester as this Dean (along with Winchester's personality which is definitely darker, although both hunt bad supernatural beings), but now I am totally hooked.

BTW, a small correction - "patients" are people who see a doctor while "patience" is being able to wait without getting upset/angry.

Lastly, thanks for adding in the translations, though ironically, I studied Spanish in school so I can totally read what Maria and Jose are saying in their native language. But Greek - sometimes I can guess, other times, totally confused.

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