by ghostriter
I get the D&S stereotypes but hate the underlying vibe of this story. These two are supposed to be be close friends but Darnell is a sneaky, manipulative, dishonest DL gay man who admittedly rapes his “friend” and completely messes with his head in the process. That’s just messed up on so many levels. It presents Darnell as a selfish, lying asshole and Jay as a naive, stupid, doormat.
I don't get the whining about "racist" here. Both of the characters are stereotypes, it's a hot fantasy, and not something to get all offended about.
I'm really looking forward to seeing how Darnell pushes things even further.
But needs editing. There are numerous sentences that just don't make sense...It's like there are words missing from them or something. This detracts a little from the overall quality. Other than that -- 5 stars!