All Comments on 'Caitlin Loses Control Ch. 01'

Look the tryst was written well. It would have been so much better if the author followed through on the tidbits given about the main players. Caitlin was used but not appreciated by men before meeting Ben ? Details please.

Then she meets Ben and is attracted but " doesn't think he can keep up ". Write about that and how fateful 2nd date where Ben flips the script. That's drama and tension when the outcome is in doubt . The post marriage coupling was a sure-thing , slam dunk but belonged as cherry on top of metaphorical story sundae. Good luck.

Maybe 5 or 6 more as good as this one and you will make the cut. (Just kidding.) Thanks for the read. Looking forward to your next submission.

Very nice first effort- seems like it's heading toward a BDSM path between two consenting adults. I look forward to reading more, and I like stories that take their time.

now keep it coming!

RA

Good little story.