All Comments on 'Calculated Moves Ch. 10'

Jamie is already an asshole, we know that, but is having her go all magic dick the right thing ?..jury is out for me but I suppose something had to give. I read non con and BDSM, both for different reasons. Personally I like it when the asshole stays bad and she still fights, thus keeping it non con.

That's my twopence worth but enjoying the story anyway.

Hi Masterfuljim

First up you're one of my favourite commentators on this site so the fact that you comment on my stories is like oh yay, lol.

Yeah we know Jamie's an asshole, I'm not sure if I should keep him like that or change him, but personally I also like when the guy stays bad and the girl fights back, so with Sky don't worry I'll give her a reason to fight back and Jamie sure as hell didn't turn good, lol.

As for the bdsm and non con combo, I'm kinda in mixed fantasies at the moment so that's why the story feels like its on the fence. I want to and will keep the story non con though. With this chapter I felt I just needed Jamie to be gentler before Sky cracked.

I'm happy you're enjoying the story.

Lol your twopence is worth alot! Thank you

Take care everyone, I hope you all enjoy the story as well.

Niki

thank you for coming back to this story

This is one heck of an awesome chapter. Loved it!! Missed the other chapters. For sure will be reading this story from the beginning! Thank you.

I got so excited when I saw this chapter was posted! I feel like I'm on the same dilemma as you lol . I want it to still be a dark anguish story but with a HEA? Idk I like this chapter , but I'm hoping for more dark stuff later on ! But overall love this story , CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE .

I would like to see an intense and dark week, a good fight from Sky and then giving her notice after the week is over, move away and let Jamie hanging out to dry, allowing him time to realize what a badass and how much worse he is without her, and maybe, maybe a HEA.

Waiting for next chapter.

Then get a decent storyline. This is tired and worn out.

Loved it can't wait for the next one; please done make us wait that long. Also, no worries on the spell check and grammar. Those can be easily overlooked because the storyline is ah-mazing!

Thanks for continuing it. Like the way it seems to be headed. Hoping for a HEA. Please give us another chapter soon.

Hi, I love your story, and this is my favorite chapter so far. I love the direction your are taking with this new chapter. I also agree with the "badass, but no asshole" approach on the character. I particularly enjoy their little lunch game -- it helped answer some of your readers' questions and at the same time showed off your ability as a writer. I don't get why people get hung up by minor typos (& there aren't that many here)-- I don't suppose perfect spelling is what drew them to this site in the first place. I think you are a great writer, your story line is interesting and convincing, and your sex scenes are hot! Please, please write more chapter like this, and as fast as you can:)!! This is one of my favorite stories. Trust your instinct. Thanks Niki!!!

Hi guys

There's some really mixed reviews, from which I'm gonna assume you didn't like the whole magic dick...lol who doesn't like a good magic dick once in a while. But I'll bring the darkness back in the next one so don't stress! Thank you all for your comments and feedback, I love it, it's feels nice to get something back after working so long on a story. I'll respond to each of your comments below.

Anon: Welcome back

Thank you for having me, it's great to be back!😢

Anon: Wow!

Yay thank you, awesome was what I was going for😊 Not sure you should go back and read the rest of my story though, lol as strange as it sounds, I had a really bumpy start😂 so don't judge me, I just got a little excited so my writing was completely all over the place, surprisingly these guys stuck around, lol between you and I that's why I love them so much😳...yes I just went all deep😄

Hey minxxxkitten

Thank you for all your comments so far🙌 I've seen you around, lol. I'm excited you're excited. I'm happy you liked the chapter but I'm gonna try my best to make you love the next one though😟

Hi Plegamans

Thank you for reading, I love your comments ☺ You gave me exactly the type of comment I wanted cos you told me what you want, I'll see what I can do😋 please keep the good advice coming, I need it!

Anon: Get an editor

You'll never believe it, just guess...come on...okay wait for it...I GOT AN EDITOR!...and a freaking brilliant one at that😍 I can't wait to start work on the next chapter now.

Thank you for your honest comment, I think you're right it does feel worn out and tired so I'll try harder in the next one, hopefully it will be to your liking.😟

PS: If you're the same guy bitching around about everyone else's stories, just to be mean, get a life!!!😊

Anon: onedf you get alife dear annony you retard

AWW YOU'RE JUST THE SWEETEST! You know that😢 thank you for having my back😙 but don't ever stoop down to their level, we're better than that so if some people get a kick outta being jerks we'll let them...anything that floats their boat right. Long as everyone's happy, it's fine☺

Anon: Great story!

Phew someone actually likes where the story is heading, thank you😊 I'll try to get the chapters out as soon as I can.

Anon: Love what you are doing!!!

Lol and I love you😢 you made me feel better about this chapter, I feel like you really get me and this story, thank you for your awesome comment😙. I'll definitely go with my instinct, I always do😊

Take care everyone, be back soon😙

Love

Niki

this chapter was good! I think its a good thing to have more sexual scenes lol but dont lose the darkness to this story pls. you can always go magic dick once in a while but the darkness is what makes the story special :) muhahaha maybe im just evil and enjoy watching skylar suffer and cry while jamie is mean to her >.< and i definitely dont mind a hea at the end (but only after he forces her into a load of stuff)

i personally prefer you keeping the story dark. maybe at the end they can reconcile or something but i definitely like it when skylar crys or gets hurt hahaha

You were very detailed as always, and you didn't seem too rushed. I do enjoy her battle she has within...but I don't remember if she's on birth control, cause he seems to want to get her knocked up....lol. Question is...is he willing to leave his finance for her, he doesn't seem to be very happy with her. A surprised meeting from Judith in the office after a thorough fuck on his desk would be great read... I would love how Skylar handles that one. Any who......great chapter please keep them coming. Kisses

When I first started reading Ch. 01, I'll be honest, I thought this was going to be cheesey, but I continued reading & then I couldn't stop. Yes, there's lots of little mistakes, but the story & characters are good. I've read the Fifty Shades of Grey books one too many times & it gets super cheesey. And there are so many little mistakes in each book and I'm sure she had an editor. You're good, don't stop. Please make the next chapter a long one. Thank you!

I love this story but I want more of his back story. Why is he so obsessed with her? He says he's never forced anyone before so why her, why now? Btw a little magic dick is always good.

I absolutely love your stories, I have been keeping up with every one. When can we expect #11? and keep up the good work girl...BTW I personally love the magic dick aspect in these stories.

Hope to see more of this story soon!

Non con turns me on, but also makes me feel sick. Yours is very well written. I want more of this story. It's hard to read, but It's harder to stop reading. Please post more.

Sooo...when's the next chapter? I wanna meet this fiance also. She sounds as manipulative as him. Maybe you can pair her off with the doting friend. He's a softy as well - someone needs to toss him around a bit or he might stick to the virgin lifestyle like flypaper.

Evebroughtanaxthistime

I think this was a. Fantastic chapter and I'm hoping that those contraceptives weren't actually birth control. It would be hot as hell if he was breeding her to ensure she was his

I am a loyal reader of your story and have been waiting months now for the next chapter. I know you may be busy and family/school/work creeps up on you but even a 1 page continuation of the story would suffice :) please!

Love this story and truly hope that you update soon.

I love this, please continue

Please continue with this story

I can see this story going in so many different directions. I know where I would like it to go but your the writer so here I will wait for you to gives us more. I could see myself buying this off of Amazon for my kindle. Please write more. James/Jamie kinda reminds me of a Christain Grey or Gideon from the Crossfire Series. Please write more.

Are you ever going to finish?

Another story thats probably gonna go unfinished...typical for this site.

you can try grammarly.com and hemingwayapp.com for editing i use them for all my papers and they are free.

please come back and finish the story

Niki, will you ever continue this story? It's too sad if this story just gets abandoned like this. Please please keep writing

I have seriously read this story dozens of time.pls complete it

Please finish it!

Hey Niki, it's December.. Patiently waiting for that update hey. Great story, can't wait to see how it'll end.

I wish you had written another chapter. It's a really good story.

I like it. It needs work but you have talent. I would love to see more work from you on this story or another is fine, often times people want you to "finish" and the fact is its already finished.

Sad this story never got finished it was great even though I felt like beating him up I’m glad that it seems like they’re moving in some sort of direction I’ll read no matter which Direction take it please update don’t be one of those that abandon a story hope all is well

Yet another abandoned story. Niki526, you had a good thing going, please, finish it for your fans.

loved it

Call it sentimental, call it weird, or call it whatever you like, but I still come back to Literotica and check for updates on Calculated Moves regularly. Hope you are still there, and hope you know that this is still one of my favorite work on this site. Come back please.

Wow that was so sweet, thank you, I logged in here after months, and seeing your comment took me back to that time when I actually wrote this, I wish I could go back...lol now I'm being weird/sentimental. I never forgot this story, just had so much memories and people attached it, felt it was best not to continue. But it is just a story I guess, i did write the next chapter a few years ago, I'll have a look around for it, and upload it soon. Thank you (hugs)

This story is amazing , please make another chapter. It’s been killing me not to know what happened to them or if they end up together.

It was a nice story if i could see the ending.cause to me he is just a asshole and she is simply siper submassive. May be it was thats it. Or may be i expected more. I dont expect him to change nor to her. But i thought or expected them to develop but i see nothing but the same olly me. Still i read this atoey to see of my way of seeing this story will change for a moment.

Well done!

But I feel like we are dangling in mid-air.

It is a tragedy that you have not finished this great story.

Am I disappointed or sad or happy.. honestly I think I am confuse. Because u have added human side to him making it is rather complicated to hate him. Hope u gonna write their development.