All Comments on 'Call Me Daddy Ch. 02'

I can't wait to read more!

You tell a good story! No small feat. Some of the grammar and neglect of details was distracting. You could enhance the experience by editing or have an editor look it over.

You hit every marker on Dom check list!

Amazing continuation! I agree with a previous comment about watching for details.

This is a great story and I have loved both so far but as others have already indicated it could be even better with a little effort put into proof reading. I hope future editions are cleaner and more professional. You have talent for story telling.

Nice story but the grammar and spelling leave a LOT to be desired. My pet peeves are people who can't differentiate between slide and slid, taught and taut (both of which you are guilty of) but also passed and past, their, there and they're & worse and worst (none of which you used). You need someone to proofread before you submit your story. And why when it was looked over for publication someone on Literotica didn't catch the errors is beyond me. It makes it harder to enjoy a story when you constantly have to stop and try to figure out what word you were meaning to use.

This story makes me miss being a little.