by Her11
Super hot! I loved the way Jace enjoyed the fuck. I do hope you will try and find an editor to catch some of the spelling errors.
First 2 parts were a little short, but they actually give a good build up to this EXCELLENT third part. Please have a part 4 (and 5 and 6)...
Need more...what happens between the two of them, its too good not to finish. Loved it
So much potential. You should have maybe given a warning about the BDSM. I wouldn't have read if I'd have known it was going to be some weird gay versions of 50 shades.
I definitely like that you made it a little longer this time. I hope you keep up writing and posting, I can't wait to see what happens next.
If you don't have an editor/beta reader you could consider getting one. Your writing is really good, but there is still room to make it even better, grammatically and otherwise.
Keep up the good work!