All Comments on 'Cathy and Kim'

by iser21

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pcarppcarpover 8 years ago
try proof reading your story

One of the girls has a dick, the other has a pussy, right?

"Cathy pulled her skirt down and off and I could see a cock in her panties."

and

"I felt my cock going deeper into Kim's mouth and was looking at a 5 ½ inch hard cock in Cathy's panties. "

So we can assume it is Cathy that has the dick, correct? But then:

"I felt Kim's balls slapping my balls as I went all the way in. I took hold of her hips and pumped harder and faster. Just when I thought I was going to cum, Kim pull off my cock. She moved and then told me. 'I'm going to fuck your ass Bob. Is this your first time?' "

and

" 'Fuck me Bob. Fuck my ass as Cathy sucks my dick. Do it!'. "

So now suddenly Kim has the dick?

It's not just one typo, it is all through the story. Make up your mind. It is hard to keep up when the characters keep switch anatomy.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Three take-aways

One girl has a dick.

One girl has a pussy.

The author has his head up has arse!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Poorly edited

Poorly edited. Either one shemales or two... Make your mind up!

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