All Comments on 'Cecilia at Folsom 2015'

by JaySon49

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago

The dialogue fit very well for the scene. Strangers playing ought to talk and check. Jay's POV and narration was also good. The action was sexy and just enough for a first interaction and in public. I like that you didn't go into fantasy extremes.

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