All Comments on 'Children of Moonlight'

Overall the story is good, with excellent description. What detracted from it most, however, was the flip-flopping between past and present tense. Also, it seemed odd that the main character seemed to know what was going on with her partner (for example she had her eyes closed yet still knew how his expression changed). Taking that part out or rewording it ("I could imagine him...") would make a difference, as well.