All Comments on 'Chocolate'

strange,but willing to go another pg or 2

Some errors here and there. I will stick with you because I'm curious.

I am hooked. I want to know more of this world and of the people in it. I hope you write more.

nice start have not given too much away so leaving us in suspense for more

its really good keepit coming and it would be even better it it was more then 1 page lol

I'll be waiting for the next chapter...

this is a good start. can't wait to see where you go with this story

Nice start, I can't wait to see where this story is heading.

An excellent first effort. Looking forward to more.

You made me wish to read on, which is the ultimate goal of any writer.

Yes this story is good. I can't wait for the next installment. I hope you will

post it soon. Five golden stars you deserve and more. Keep up the great work

that is your magnificent writing style.

Wonderful first outing. Congratulations. You write well and tell a good tale. One thing, and it is probably my fault- When the POV shifted, I was briefly confused as I didn't realize it had shifted. I back tracked and re-read, then was fine. Moremoremore.

chapter two please!

Congrats on a fantastic start lots of intrigue from the get go. Can not wait for more you have me hooked already.

As soon as i finally write a story that's when i get distracted! Hopefully soon I can upload chapter two! Thanks you guys <3

I was writing the last few paragraphs for chapter 2 last night and I took a break. Later that night my laptop fell off of my bed and the screen is totally blown. *SIGH* It's going to be a longer wait than I wanted it to be. Sorry you guys!

Sorry to hear about ur laptop should be an easy fix tho for a repair dude, my step son has done it but not a cheap fix. If ur UK n have accidental damage on ur house insurance it might be covered on that. Thanks for the update hun xx

Just submitted Chapter 2! Hopefully it will be up in a couple of days :D

A most interesting start so you have succeeded in wetting my curiosity. Congrats! Please write more.