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Again I thought I wasn't going to stop cumming as long as her pussy muscles kept squeezing my dick and then releasing the squeeze for a moment, before re-squeezing my dick again, causing me to shoot a rope of cum out into her pussy.
When we finally calmed down from our orgasm Sue stood up straight pulling off of my softening cock and turned around to face me and put her arms around my neck, then she leaned in and we kissed each other in a very passionate lovers kiss.
When she broke the kissing off, Sue looked at me, "Man baby, you made me cum so much like I've never cum so much in my life. I believe we need to go get something to eat, or we may never get this big bad boy back in my pussy again for a while."
"I do believe you are so right about going to get something to eat Love." I then turned and shut the water off, then grabbed a towel and dried Sue off, and then she dried me off after I finished drying her off. "One of us needs to give mom and dad a call and let them know where we're at and that we're okay too."
- COMMENTS
bigdaddyg123about 2 years ago"Christmas In The Middle Of Nowhere:" - In the movie 'Patton' shortly after Supreme Allied Commander (SAC) Dwight D. "Ike" Eisenhower had recently promoted General Omar "Brad" Bradley over General George S Patton Jr, "Brad" is attempting to explain to Patton why "Ike" had promoted General Bradley over Patton, "Brad" says to his long-time friend, "George, you just DON'T KNOW WHEN to shut-up, George!!!"
A similar trait is used in law, when one is a witness in a trial, where the witness is told many times by the Defense Attorney, "make sure you (as a witness) use minimum words--no more than necessary--to answer (to testify) any question." Remember, "George" you just don't know when to shut-up" means don't use more words than necessary to get your point across!! Ever.....little.....detail.....is.....not.....necessary!
On the creative side, you, 'HankWilliams1956' have good ideas for story themes. All good stories have three (3) main themes, being a Beginning, a Middle, and an End. Using ingenuity and writer's talent to develop ideas around those themes...before starting to write, will improve most writer's abilities and concepts of any story. Talking with other writers and authors can garner methods and ways to write good stories. The biggestand hardest accomplishment of being a writer/author, is the willingness of wanting to write! After you've accomplished willingness, your ability and techniques are the things that need the most attention and development.
Anonymousabout 5 years ago"Hi Johnny, this is your mother here calling..." Because that's just how a mother would speak. NOT.
Some of the worst dialogue of all time. Don't give up your day job for an erotica career!!
Anonymousalmost 6 years agoYou most definitely NEED a proofreader, especially one with an English/writing background. Such help would reduce your story by 20% to 25% by eliminating duplication of words/phrases that cause readers to lose track of the story line. This help would definitely improved sentence structure and wording and improve story flow. With a number of readers telling you the same thing, why not take their advice and counsel? It is obvious that you need help.
Just because you can put words on "paper/screen" does not make you an author. It takes a total effort to make an author and if you refuse to take advice and use it, you will never become an author.
I. for one. choose to forgo any additional of your submissions, and this is the first I've ATTEMPTED to read. I stopped on the first page.
Think for a moment. Although you may not have been inundated with negative comments, how many others simply got fed up with the constant repetition of like same phrases and words in the same sentence and just stopped reading and made no comment,
auhunter04about 6 years agoall these critics telling you to do something but not step up to the plate to help.Jerks
I admit I am not good to offer my services, but I do have a suggestion, a trick used by professional proofreaders. Read your story backwards one word at a time. That will allow to find miss used words as well as awkward spots. That should help you over a lot of their unhelpful nit-picking ways
