by twofourthree
GREAT STORY! Lots of spelling, grammatical and usage errors, making it hard to be sure of what you are saying. Please find a good proof reader. Thank you for an intriguing story!
Your writing is really great. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
I absolutely love it! Anxiously anticipating the next chapter!
We are following a young man with an old soul.
I especially liked the respect and compassion he showed to Clare.
There's gotta be more you can't just leave it hanging like that oooooooo u suck lol good job on the story can't wait for more
The first 6 parts introduce us to a complicated life situation. I like how the story develops. It is a real story, not just a series of porn vignettes. Good start!
I really like how much compassion they she each other.
But, I have to say the constantly shifting use of names was difficult to follow. Jay and JB are easy, but Mom and Rhonda, Dad and Mike left me scratching my head once in a while. At first it was just to wonder why he called his mother by her first name. Stepdad being Mike is understandable, but just as often he was also Dad.
This series was so engrossing that I couldn't stop reading it even though I was really tired at the start of the the story!!!! Excellence in words!!!!!!!
Terry
I really enjoyed reading this first installment and look forward to the rest. It reminds me of "Aunt Jean" by A_Satori. I like the careful build up of the story line and the character development.
There are a few grammar issues, but so minor that I easily skipped right over them, the story was that engaging.
Excellent work, please keep it up! 5 stars from me.
This was by far the most well, enjoyable storie I've read; And I quote " JB Was so sweet for what he'd done for his Aunt...He was a gentleman, and gave his Aunt something special Her dignity back and self-worth. 😇😏.....
has another tale to read, like his others it will keep u wanting more.
5 ***** 243
I don't often give 5s up if we had a 25 on this scale, this story would get it!! I very seldom read 3 or 4 page storys, I loved all 6 pages!!
This is one of the best storys I have read ever. Thank You for a very enjoyable, readable, entertaining story. Looking forwar to more of your stuff. Especially this group of charactors, all of them!!
Nancy, Clare, Jesse(?), Rhonda, the Limo service, the roofing company, the uni, the beautiful young woman who dresses older, and something has to be resolved with Odell.
Thank you for your continued works. The beginning of another great story I think.