All Comments on 'Cliche'

I will thank you for a great read to me. And thanks for sharing.

I guess you're more interested writing stories atm, rather than watch The Ashes ;)

Btw, gave it a 5*. I like your stories.

Greetings from Oz

Gave you five stars for this one. I like your stories. Keep writing.

two downfalls in a good marriage. TK U MLJ LV NV

When he comes to his senses boy is he gonna be pissed about the dent.

Only kidding.

Great tale.

I enjoyed reading your story.

Made me laugh and worth five stars. Just one question. Are you sure she dented the car? After all you gave her the idea, maybe you had caught her out playing around! You did just leave the niggling doubt.

Maybe you could turn this on its head with a follow up

You're a bad, bad man . Thank you.

...loved it.....LOL

Oh what a mess we can get into when we think too much, and talk to little. 4*

Good, as far as it presents itself. However, the ending doesn't make a lot of sense. Was she paying the guy with sex? Why was she parking her car and going to his apartment several times?

Ha ha! Very cute! Aren't you the clever one!!

Not so much.

Let's think one more minute, shall we.....?.

Just a couple of lies to her husband, so NO MORE TRUST, but FOR YOU, no problem, right?

I once had a girlfriend who said she told me the truth 99% of the time.

I said great, but RIGHT NOW, am I hearing the 99% or the 1%???

And THAT is the problem, clever boy!!

So the NEXT TIME she's late and there is NO DENT, then what?? )))))))

And just one more little thought....

how was she going to PAY for it, since he'd find out if she took money from their account?? Maybe on her back? I mean, what's ONE MORE lie, yes? ))))

So when YOUR wife lies to you......

Just tell yourself that your wife is simply getting her car fixed!!!! )))))))))))

Just remember to skip the ORAL SEX!!!

Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Darling I have some good news and some bad news which do you wish first. The husband immediately asks for the good news first. " well honey the airbags in the Jag work perfectly......." Oh yeah 5 + 1 stars! Always top notch writing ! Thanks

I enjoyed the premise of the story but ...

How was the payment made?

Wouldn't the husband notice the money missing from the bank account?

Why was she meeting this guy at his house instead of his work place where he fixes cars?

But it is another case of a wild bull running head on without looking around first. He really has no idea what is going on! Get your ducks in a row before opening your mouth! I agree with the idea that once you know she lies you might as well turn her in for a new model without dents....

Divorce her anyway, get it over with... come on, you know you want to!

Divorce - the sacrament that WORKS!

love your stuff, plus the happy endings, call me a sentimental fool

I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!!!

didn't guess the car getting scratched. Cute little story, probably a 4 but I gave it a 5 anyway. Any story that isn't a willing cuckold story these days gets an extra star from me.

1 The car was dented, because I say it was.

2 he said "let's pay the man!"

3 I made a point of saying her car was parked outside some commercial premises!

Thank god most of you have a sense of humor. Still, if it gives some of you pleasure to always see the bad side, then pleased to have been of service.

I sort of figured it was something to do with that car, but that was priceless! Thanks for the chuckles. :D

5 Stars.

a real, genuine loving wife!

Nice one!

She lied to her husband. Not a good marriage.

A really fine story for the Holliday season. Thank you!

BritEZ

Parking in front of a body-shop was never said! A 'commercial establishment' was ONLY said during the 5:30 'assignation!'

However, warning the reader that NO sex was to be had, pulled a lot of the lion's teeth! Combine that with a deliberately ambiguous overheard telephone conversation and the rest of the kitten's teeth were pulled!

4* nonetheless. Thanks!

. . . but almost as satisfying. I love a good pun any day and twice on Sunday. Always enjoy your delightful sense of humour as well Brit. {just forced to use the across the ocean spelling on that humor}

Thanks for a fun quick interlude.

Thanks. Quite wonderful. You taught me a lesson which I certainly deserved. :-)

She could never admit that she dented a new car!

B,

Good job--again.

Matt

But didn't she realize how angry he was? BEFORE she explained? She didn't realize he felt that he had caught her cheating? Not too clever that one. You sure you haven't been at the schnapps again?

There have been story books written about people who cannot lie. We all do, and we all ignore or forgive harmless lies. Husband is irrational about damage to the car, the wife very reasonably ducked the issue, because it is no big deal. Speaking personally my wife and I have separate checking accounts since our marriage was six months old. each has access to the passwords. She or I could pull a fair amount of money out and the other would not notice.

If you set a high enough bar, nobody will clear it. If you want perfection, don't marry, you have enough to keep yourself busy .

Oh well, it was a nice upbeat story, as advertised

Chilley

awful and predictable

before Harry " gets " satire in story or writes one.

What are we going to do with you? I'm sure you're quite a sweet old man really, but I guess all those years working as a PI (Yes really- he was), has soured this aspect of your character. Never mind. If my writing continues to keep you amused, then I'll keep on trying.

She's caught flat out about to get a little strange rough, as we say, and he's so relieved by the first credible story she cooks up that he accepts it, that it's all about a dent in a fender? Doesn't even ask each separately "which fender" to see if they can agree? Unfaithful wives everywhere can learn from her!

(more seriously, you overplayed his suspicion and then indignation and underplayed his denial, heartache, all the rest of what you understand so well, so by the end your narrator was a caricature worthy of being duped -- which is no doubt why the above occurred to me as equally credible, as alas it is)

Thanks!

making me feel good. This was a double feel good. An honest mistake that was corrected before the husband made an utter fool of himself, and H.I.V. didn't like it.

Good cover story, but...no proof

etc. etc. Wife too stupid to function or too duplicitous to live. Hard to guess which one.

She knows she would have been dressed down if she had let Ken handle it so she was taking the path of least resistance. I blame Ken for creating an environment where she feared telling him some little trivial mistake and having to take a clandestine approach to getting a car ding fixed. As to the paranoids. We are told she has never given him any hints that there was a problem in their relationship until the day of the mishap...

Why do some people feel they have to assassinate the author's character if they write something that doesn't get their approval or get their winkie hard. How much did they pay to read the story? Maybe they should just ask for their money back (heh heh) and move on to something else that won't raise their cockles.

Funny🤣

Short and sweet.

And a great change from the usual fare here. Thank you.

Uh huh......THAT'S what she was doing.

You don't write badly... But these short stories aren't as clever as you think they are... They're a little simplistic... With themes that are far from original... But i get the feeling that if you actually dug deep and worked hard to get past the superficial... You could write something good... As always... Jmo

-jaye-

To some of your quirky stories. I just knew this one wasn't going to be what the husband thought was going on, just didn't know the details. To be honest I thought she was having a toy built or rebuilt for him. But considering the genre this story is in he should maybe, just maybe keep his eyes and ears open. Probably nothing, but just saying... Good job from across the pond. Signed: BTW

The car was on the street parked, how do u fix a dent or scratch on the MX5 sports car when sitting away from the shop ? ? ?

Had me going there. Nice flash 5*

got a good laugh. Most of these stories are a certain kind of tale, but you had a great twilight zone finish

How is she paying for it dummy On her back or knees? How many times?

Laughing at him...and such a relief....he was even happy to know about the damage to the car..!!! Funny end..

And I needed a happy ending today. Thank you.

Another little bit of Britease mastery of the short story.

Britease can write clever little stories.

paying????

your story didn't make sense, ?

I still remember her coming home, fearful after a fender bender, we could not afford the repair. I would forgive her anything, anything at all. Fifty years this December and still she is with me, silly girl.

Thanks for the yarn mate.

Wonderful!!! One of the sweetest short tales here. So well done. Easy 5*

A creative little yarn. Just the right length. 4 stars.

Great 5*

Good thing he did not hire a Private Investigator. 😉 Fun read, Thank-you. 5 ⭐s

Nope. A writer (or writers) trying to be smart and failing. It didn't work for me because you stirred the pot too much. That's were most of the kind of plots fail, because later when the truth (?) is revealed, us, readers, hard it find to explain all the trasnpired before when youw ere trying to make us think she was cheating.

WAS THE SLUT WIFE PAYING OFF THE REPAIRS BY SEX WITH STEVE, LOOKS LIKE IT!!

I have a hard time believing that. Keep an eye on her.

dude you are a wimp , your whore lied and you fell for it hook line and sinker.

This story is idiotic.

Quit writing!

Cute.

Story than I thought.

Funny.

She paid him with sex

One shouldn't worry so much about their wife's ass that they make themself one.

For the kid posting: dude you are a wimp

There is a saying that you apparently choose to ignore: It is better to keep quite and let people assume that you are a moron, than to speak/write and prove that you are indeed a moron.

Good one.

She is a smart cheater and he is a dumbass

Haha, good one.

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I don't think you should be putting "cheating" as a tag, if there is no cheating happening

A reader should be able to look at a story's tags to figure out what sort of story it is. The tags on this story are deliberately misleading. There is no cheating and no infidelity.

Funny