by tomthewriter
what a jerk spencer is. he didn't even ask if he had somewhere to go. where did he expect him to sleep? outside?
such a good story so far. well written and i like how he doesnt think much of his hidden sexual desires that slip out every little bit. Really good keep writing!! Love these college ones!
All black people don't talk in that way and it seems that you are trying to portray him as if he can only speak in Ebonics. Please try to broaden your horizons and not stereotype your characters so much.
Gave this story a try to here, but can't go further. The dialogue is just too dreadful. Who speaks like that? Are these guys meant to be English speaking?
So far, so good. But what's up with the short stories? I read all 6 and it's a little much with the abbreviated stories. I like the writing. Finally a story with a black guy who isn't speaking Ebonics. (Yes, I'm an articulate black guy who gets offended by those that try too hard and think we all start our convos with "Yo, yo, yo, Son..."
By the way, ignore anyone who posts ANON as most are scared little bitches. Keep writing and give me more material. You'd get higher ratings if you'd combine these chapters.