All Comments on 'Country Life'

The pacing of this story was much too fast. You moved the characters from introduction to lovers in a span of hours and changed the female's name from Grace to Gloria in the process. More story and more editing were needed here.

Lots of goodness here, however I agree about pacing.

Best,

Cape Fear, NC, USA

it's okay except the girl's name changed in the middle. weird.

It's not particularly believable that the "town bike" is actually a virgin. You had me convinced that her promiscuity had been inflated by rumor, which would have been a good place to stop the hyperbole. By making your character a virgin, your hyperbole becomes indistinguishable from the townpeople's.

It was good while it lasted.

and found the right bloke. TK U MLJ LV NV

Too simple. To much of a fantasy that a "good" girl would give herself so quickly and easily.

By the way: is her name "Grace" or "Gloria"

And only half of what you see - LOL

Good for the tow of them - BUT she did jump[ him pretty quickly - love at first site is a bit risky heh.

A very fun short story. A very well thought out and written story. I definitely look forward to reading more of your work. As this is my first foray into your writing and the first story you posted here I have added you to my favorites list. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.