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All Comments on 'Cum Slut Cabin Visit'

by yellowdog46

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AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
No thank you

Honestly, pick a writing style and stick to it. You, your, her, my, his.

It's a massive turnoff when you don't know who the hell is doing what.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Really

What is up with the exclamation points?

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Seperation

Dialogue needs separated! Come on. Obvious writing tip mate.

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