All Comments on 'Daddy Takes To Tennis'

The end of this story just made it ridicolous. Wasting my time on another stupid hopeless story... Don't even know why I did bother with this comment......

Try not to repeat things so much and if you want them to be represented as high-end, classy people, you shouldn't have them say things like "piss" "spunk" "cunt", the language is really dirty compared to their personalities. Other than that, nice.

i gave up reading this story, quotation marks needed when speech is represented, spelling needs some work to

Story was meh. Rubbish has two 'b's, since someone mentioned spelling.

You need a course in writing, and learn other words besides cunt.