All Comments on 'Damsel in Distress'

a bit short and no background info on the I person, this was more like a page in a story but has potential, so keep writing.

Doesn't belong in romance. There is NO ROMANCE here and she is no damsel in distress. 1* Post your stories in the right damn category! This belonged n EROTIC COUPLINGS

Your grammar, syntax and spelling are fine but you need to spend much more time developing your characters so that you tell a story.

Previous comments are quite correct.

you have to start somewhere and build from there

Build your characters and your story

And keep writing

Looking forward to seeing more from you, hopefully with longer chapters.

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Please continue to write.

I does not think so. Graphic sex has a place in romance stories, but the feelings/emotions come first, not the carnal lust/bodily fluids that might follow. Per other comments here, you need to fully develop your characters before they plunge into the physical part - or not, because a well crafted, compelling romance tale doesn't need graphic sex to move the reader.

and remember: show the every detail through emotionally charged adjectives. Then the story will have the potential to ignite an inferno in the loins of all who gaze at the pages.

Good waiting for more !