All Comments on 'Dance with the Devil Ch. 03'
by Peachyrome
- 11 Comments
savannuhover 15 years agobut I think since you accidentally re-submitted Chapter One as Chapter Two - we missed whatever happened before. I'd like to be able to read that whenever things get straightened out. Otherwise, great story... looking forward to see how it turns out! Also, it sucks he didn't let her cum - hahaha - sucks to be her! :-D Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing your talent!
Anonymousover 15 years agocould u maybe post chapter 2 as "chapter 2 part 2"?...that way it would technically be a new title
Anonymousover 15 years agoBut as someone else noted, Ch 2 was posted twice, so something's missing. We need a chapter between 2 and 3, because we missed what happened between Marcellus and Darien in the kitchen.
Anonymousover 15 years agoGreat chapter. Love this story but it sort of feels that they're moving a little too fast. They need a lot more drama with him being a mobster... I want to see him live up to the name the Devil. He seems like he should be a lot scarier. And Darien can't even try to deny or stop the attraction she has for him now.
Anonymousover 15 years agoyou're continuing on like we know what happened in chpt 2. there was no chpt 2. it was 1 repeated...which is why people are commenting and saying its too fast, we've missed a bunch...
innocent_angelover 15 years agoI'm really liking this story, but I'd have to agree with the others, we missed something vital in chapter 2. I know how long it can take to get a chapter posted so I'm hoping that you've re-submitted and we're just waiting for TPTB to approve. But any way, so far, so good, with the exception of what we've missed anyway.
THELOVELY1GLOabout 13 years agoDamn, so hot,,,,then cold!!! Damn, he is so sexy, yet wrong for leaving a lady wanting :>)
Anonymousover 12 years agoObviously, part of Christos' job description is loan shark. It's doubtful her brother even owed the full $10K to begin with - let alone interest enough to double the amount owed. That said, how does she know Christos will keep his word to cancel her brother's debt if she goes out on one date with him? What are the chances he won't come up with some way to extend this date into more 'debt.' The other question - which she probably should have asked the night before - is why are you so interested in me? $20K is a lot of debt to erase for one date.
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