All Comments on 'Darkness in Seattle'

Please continue, I like where this is heading.

Excellent start for a Were story ! Just my cup of tea .

Keep up the good work , but please don't keep us waiting long.

I have several series I follow and were stories are one of my favorites .

Thanks for a Great start .

tx cracker

I love it!! Can't WAIT to read it all!!

Nice start to the story. Please continue and would love for it to be longer.

This is my first story and I appreciate the feedback, I definitely will keep updating as fast as possible. Much love.

I read pt 2 before pt 1 but will start my comments here (i focus on story mostly and since this is your first, i wanted to encourage you to keep going)

I like this start, if you are a writer you have given us the start of act I in the "hero's journey" plot (character's in normal life) non writers who read this may say "wtf who cares" but i think most of those people don't come here for "stories" lol. I come for um.. a bit of both.

Anyway, nice opening, it's tight and informative without dragging you into heavy boring exposition. You have foreshadowed conflict and added a little suspense with Anton and clearly stated his goal. I don't normally read paragraph upon paragraph...I like dialogue to tell the story but since these too have not met yet, they can't talk yet lol.

So in just reading your short intro, i will continue. As i said, even though you are early in the story, you get to the point with enough to keep me interested and most importantly i can visualize the scene...i found myself reading slowing and taking it in, not skimming over lots of unecessary blather.

I will comment on part 2 now.

cz

For your first story, it's good so far! It's clear to read and very well written. It's not too silly like many writers on here tend to do, I can't wait to read more!

Great start!

Great start and intro into the characters