by Egmont Grigor
To get personality/characterology, humor, in such a short piece is
amazing. I can criticize nothing except I had the feeling I was out of
shape (I am more than usual) as I found myself almost out of breathe at the end.
The pace was entirely appropriate and getting all the aforementioned depth in simultaneously made me tired just to imagine the work. I hope the writer keeps the sex at this level of interest/variety and allows him or herself the opportunity to expand the people and the excellent basis for relationship growth - with the light but attached or involved touch, this is really good reading.
I hoped that this would be the first of a series because it really is quite original and very charming.
Good on ya!
Please keep 'em coming our way!
Very good story and the writing is fantastic. I like the way you change your dialogue as it does flow. This story is filled with some great dialogue and it was quite a good pace.<p>I do not believe I have read your works before but I am now off to read some of your other submissions.<p>Thank you for the good entertainment.<p>PT
The story was pretty good until the condom was mentioned. I don't know why in these fantasy stories why condoms have to be used. Eroticism seems to be a high note in them and things are not very erotic if cum ends up in a rubber nipple.
Seeing the author's name I knew it would be good, but instead it was great.
Please keep the chapters cumming !
Tom, in Oregon, USA