All Comments on 'Daytona Swingers' Surprise'
by cungy22
- 30 Comments
Anonymousover 14 years agoThis wasn't about a loving couple swinging, this was about a gay guy and you. wrong section.
fumundacheezeover 14 years agoI'll give you 100 and that score is for the warning at the beginning. To me the story was about gays who were married just for show but you did however warn of MM gay activity so kudos to you. If indeed true, the men and women in the story will be taking a cocktail of drugs not to far in the future for HIV. If , on a rare occasion the men mistake their wife's cunts for a male's asshole, use birth control of some sort so kids won't be born HIV +.
Anonymousover 14 years agoFirst, skip right over the narrow-minded, mean comments. You warned them and they sound like they need to go back to relearn 8th grade English anyway.
Second, I give you a 100 for the full sensuality approach, even though some of the writing and editing was a bit careless. The theme that sex and sensuality can transend gender boundaries for both male and female is fun and exciting, and needs more exploration in the USA.
Three, so the hell with the "gay or not gay" bullshit. Write about what turns you on and what what seems new/different/pleasurable and most of all FUN.
Anonymousover 14 years ago1) A warning that you read only after you open the story comes under the category of "too little, too late." It's already been registered as a read count, so might as well give it the rating all such bait-and-switch bullshit deserves.
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2)I noticed you had nothing positive to say about the story, so one can only assume you found nothing positive to say about the story.
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3)I also noticed you were the only one to attack others for daring to have a different opinion than yours. Since that is your level: FUCK YOU IGNORANT SACK OF SHIT!
Anonymousover 14 years agoGet an editor. You say you've been writing a long time. Did you take any time to study English in school? Get an editor who has.
Anonymousover 14 years ago25 for the warning. Dont bother with the people mad because it had fags in it. You are allowed to write whatever you want, they should be judging on the quality of the story not the sexual preferences of the characters - afterall you did warn them in advance.
But the story sucked, thats the problem. Get an editor, there are too many problems in this story to even list here. Go on the LITEROTICA forum under story discussion and ask for feedback so they can elaborate.
Anonymousover 14 years agoMost writers don't seem to understand the two measurements to the success of any book or story.<P>
Content is what causes readers to buy or read a story. If it delivers or offends thats the plus or minus.<P>
The best talent on a subject that offends many or most is a waste of time for the writer and readers hence the negative comments and scores.<P>
Sometimes where the story is parked categorically assures failure as in this case. Male on Male is Gay writer - something about that which confuses you?<P>
All writers write to be appreciated therefore failing that why would anyone continue.<P>
So change categories or themes or go away. Simple huh!
Anonymousover 14 years agoMost of all, it desperately needed editing. I doubt that you even re-read it after your first draft. If you are, in fact, a couple, the second one might have read it too, which would surely have prevented some of the mstakes. But better to have a practiced eye -- an editor -- read it. There were mis-used words, missing words, changes of person, etc., etc. Maybe average fourth-grade level writing.
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It was in the wrong category. It beonged in Group Sex. You would have annoyed fewer people with the boy-boy boffing there. The initial premise was interesting a Loving Wives-ish, but then there was little focus on heterosex during theactual event. The slow start they had planned might have been more erotic.
Anonymousover 14 years ago....that's your problem.The story does not contain humiliation,the couple are in mutual consent,fine.Forget the editing errors. But when you write that some guy liked a 10 inch dick up his ass the first time he was boned it becomes unreadable.Not an actress in porn was ever able to take John Holmes full length,one of the few actual 10 inchers on record.Now argue this funshitter,and of course throw some schoolyard taunts in.Maybe these authors will at least have the spine to not delete all critical comments-pistolpackinpeteinfirst amendmentheaven
Anonymousover 14 years agowhat?, it turned out the get together was for pure monogomy activities? LOL
Anonymousover 14 years agoI have known for a long time a lot of gay activity goes on in swinging circles, not all swingers are gay but a lot are Bi. It explains how no one cares about their partner having sex with other people, most couples are more room mates than passionate in love couples anyway. The silly shit about making a marriage better is just that, but sometimes it does allow a dead marriage to contuinue. Glad I got out.
Anonymousover 14 years agoI would love to read more. I would love to read what happen next.
Anonymousover 14 years agonow she can freely go out and date men and bring a few home for her gay husband to get fucked also. Might as well share the HIV.
Asuedealmost 14 years agoThat's the way it ought to be fuck all the holes and fill them with cum, kiss and tongue and swallow the cum and enjoy the in and out everywhere and watching each other have fun
Anonymousover 10 years agoI thought it was fantastic. Needs some editing but it definititly got me off, several times!! Write more!
Anonymousover 9 years agoHe's come out of the closet as a faggot & really really likes it and she's come out of the closet as a dyke & really really likes it. Oh yeah the surprise divorce followed by AIDS & they really really like it
Anonymousalmost 9 years agoyou are a narrow minded, evil piece of shit. this is a work of fantasy;badly punctuated, but still enjoyable. why did you even read this?
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoLaurel and Jerry certainly got more than they bargained for. I almost shot a load when Ashish fuched Jerry and Allison used her over sized clit to fuck Laurel. Laurel's surprise was seeing Ashish's cock enter Jerry's ass and how much he loved it. I bet there were many more swinging parties. Glad that Jerry and Laurel and Ashish and Allison were more than happy at the way things turned out.
AnnetteBishopover 6 years agoA real turnon when my husband takes a big black hard cock up his ass. Xoxoxoxo Annette
Anonymousover 3 years agoTo blatantly flaunt disgusting and frightening bad anal hygiene makes it quite clear this writer is totally not cognizant of anal sex and its complexities. To suck a dick fresh from any asshole is appalling, and to write of taking a dick from an asshole and share it with a vagina is asking for dreadful consequences. Read Jack Morin for advice on safe anal sex practices, folks, and dismiss crap like this fantasy.
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