All Comments on 'Den of Iniquity Ch. 05'

Sir Nathan,

I can't tell you how much I've been enjoying this story. I look for a new chapter every day and I'm disappointed when I don't see one. I was thrilled to see the latest installment this morning, and am really looking forward to what happens on Roger and Josehphine's date, not to mention the party.

Absolutely wonderful.

Sir_Nathan,

again you have outdone yourself....i was in a constant state of arrousal as i read this installment. i am looking forward to the next and really don't want it to end...

your skill at painting a picture with your words leaves me breathless....

thank you,

tasteofhoney

i don't know how You keep doing it, but You have done it yet again Sir Nathan. You have left me wanting to beg for more *weg*. Wonderful work Sir....i enjoyed it from the first letter.....to the ending punctuation. Thank You for sharing Your talent with Uus!!!!

Sir Nathan, you have outdone yourself again. :)

Your talent for writing is a wonderful gift and I thank you for sharing it with us.

I look forward to the next installment of this amazing story. The party should prove to be very interesting. I can't wait.

Sir Nathan...please hurry with the next chapter...it keeps getting better and better...and You know how i look forward to Your stories...

love it look forward to reading the next chapter puts the fone off the hook lol

Adding suspense is a common element in such writings, but adding mystery can often amplify suspense in a highly unorthodox, but extra effective manner. Excellently versed. I am greatly enjoying the series thus far.

another congratualations Sir, You never cease to amaze me :D

sincerely distance

Your writing is excellent and your pieces have opened my eyes. You also seem to care a great deal about your writing, so I hope you won't mind if I mention, in the vein of constructive criticism, that the dialogue in this installment is a little confusing when three people are talking and it doesn't mention after a quote who said it. Also, the ideas seemed a little broken in few places in particular, that I no longer remember the location of. The content though, is spectacular. I will more than likely make an account on this site just to message you about your stories, and to offer my services as an editor, as I noticed a few things here and there in this series and in culture shock

Keep up the good work!

i think it was this chapter - said her piece not said her peace. also in first or second chapter - there is a reference to Adrian that is incorrect (I'll find it lol). Also did i miss where he gets the envelope? all of a sudden he had it and i couldn't find where it first appeared.

a compulsive editor here

but this is a fascinating read - an excellently composed story. erotic and great character development.

And you, SN, make reading quite pleasurable. Thank you.

-a