All Comments on 'Denise's Dancing Night...'

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I expected the husband to join in and double her up, but he didn’t

Should have asked everyone watch him kick both of them out.

But you missed the target. I would love to give it a high score. Maybe a rework would help.. Just a saying

Please join the many Literotica authors who lost in this section in helping to rid us of the troll who posts all of those negative comments. As you can tell he contributes nothing but hate and the sooner these comments are deleted the better for all of us. I hope you will consider removing those vile comments and then share more wife stories with us. Thank you

A 47-year-old mother of two dances around a barbeque pit like a hyperactive school girl, and then fucks some guy she knows, in front of her husband. Without any background, it’s impossible to understand what’s happening here. Was this her way of telling her husband she was having an affair? Why else would she (and Mark) be so comfortable doing this?

Was this a fantasy this couple had discussed many times before? If so, that should have been mentioned. Was this an act of retaliation for something the husband did? Again, no mention of that.

I’ve never understood why people submit half a story. It’s like they’re in such a rush to get to the sex scene, they completely omit the background that makes the scene erotic in the first place!

whore wife and fool for a hubby.it going too happen again.

Jumbled chaotic sentences with little coherence. 2*

Done whining? Good, now get lost ass wipe.

Truth hurts doesn't it? Just think, if people like you spent half as many words giving constructive criticism as you do on those spiteful comments, we'd have much improved writers and much better stories. Of course that wouldn't satisfy that demon inside demanding you just try to destroy someone, would it?

BTW author, you seemed a bit rushed to get this posted. I know how that feels, but you really should have put this aside a week or so and then proofed it again. There were glaring problems. GOOD LUCK cd

Don't bother with another story. You are a complete failure.

Why do you idiots that give hate filled comments and call the authors sick even read this stuff? You know what it's about..what are you into self hate and destruction that you read what you hate? I don't think you really do hate it, I think in the closet youlivethisshit but won't admit it to yourselves lol....the hate comments are hilarious

The biggest issue with this story is the length, with you next effort try to flesh out what was going on with the characters thought process or add some dialogue to make it feel a bit more complete.

He should’ve clapped at the performance and then asked her to leave with the guy when they were done. She could than suck as many black dicks as she wants . Her used soiled pussy and mouth would be of no use to me anymore

Background lays the erotic build up. Think of it as foreplay. Exploring the characters minds makes it an epic story instead of a "Penthouse Letter". You can still save this by writing a sequel where you include all these things. Oh yeah, don't forget to add hot detailed drawn out sex too!

That one loser with all the accounts needs to go. It take a very small mind to go on a porn site and post that crap. Please author do us all a favor and delete his hatred.

But the basic concept of inviting a guy over and the wife letting her inhibitions down is sexy as hell. I knew a woman like this. Her husband couldn’t handle it and divorced her. He ended up turning gay and live with a guy raising goats now.

We're glad your mother didn't have any kids either!!! She has a shit turd but no kids!!!

The wife is a slut, the husband is even worse. He is a cuck.

She is a slut and he is no man

Its his wife so why not get sloppy seconds if you want? And why no talk of it? You had discussed this prior and then she did it and if you get off on it then talk! That part made no sense.

Weak and pathetic cuck with his selfish and narcissistic slut. Couple of the year in. Cuckville. Ridiculous