All Comments on 'Diary of a Super Slutty Slut Ch. 01'

well I'll be the first -quite nicely written -concise and to the point

A pretty good start.

Would be interested to read more.

I liked it, wish his cock was mine and a girl like you was ready and willing right in front of me. I'd fuck you raw.

very nicely done! I love the picture of you on your knees, ass in the air with your back arched from him pulling your hair back! please let us have more of this slut

cheers

A damn fine story. Hot, believable, and made me wish she was here. It sure would have made my evening much more enjoyable. Looking forward to your next submission.

I really liked it!

You have a knack for brevity that works pretty well for you, although some sentences feel clipped or choppy. I thought that if the story were simply a description of having sex, it ought to focus more on that, spend more time on the sensations, etc. And try not to jump from past to present.

I struggled, I tried, he tossed

I tingle, I feel

(I struggled to get up but he told me to crawl. I tried to look graceful but stumbled as he led me. He tossed me a pillow from his couch and told me to bend over.

"Raise your ass nice and high for me... good girl."

No two words have more of an effect on me than those. I tingle all over and try to press my ass even higher into the air for him.

I feel him behind me )

Overall, I liked the story, the subject, and the way you've begun the character. If you continue the diary, will you be able to keep it from being more of the same? It'll be interesting to see. Please keep writing.

Also, why is this fetish?

I really enjoyed this. The way she was taken and used and then discarded. You need to write more.

Love to read about her adventures.

toomuchinmyhead - Hi! Thanks for the constructive criticism. I struggled so much with the past-present tense that eventually I gave up. It didn't bother me much while I read it and I knew that only a few would actually complain about it :p

Oh, and it's not fetish at all, is it? I just didn't really know where I should put it so I threw it in fetish. Well, I guess it's a story for those with a fetish for sluts, hahaha.

So, thanks to everyone for their comments.

peace

for some women, this is exactly how we love to fuck...no romance, no kissing, just being USED like a piece of fuckmeat. i look for Men (Black Men) who will fuck me that way in real life and love to read about it too.

Nice... wish it was longer... I read Chapter 2 first and then this one... It would be great to see the encounters going to a whole new level of sluttyness.

It's a nice story with good action. As it is from the slut's point of view, I'd like to know more about what's going on in her mind, not just what's happening to her but also what she's feeling about it.

Still, a hot story, worth reading and enjoying. :)

That was hotter than hot!

Yes I would love to meet you somewhere just to compare notes, nah I would like to fuck your ass like your character here. Waiting to read more of her adventures

Great story. Now give us some context - What is the rest of your life like? When and how did you become a slut? Then on to more adventures. This could be a fantastic series!