by Concerto_in_A
If I followed this correctly, only one of the men came in the wife. Hell, he didn't come at all. That's totally unbelievable.
The biggest problem is that it seems we are in the middle of the story. Why was this happening? Who were the two men and silent woman? I guess a second story would be necessary to answer these questions.
I think it was well written and a great story! Thanks for sharing, can't wait for more?
The story was intended to be, as another commented, "weird". I'm interested in how far a writer can go. So many of these stories are all too predictable. I'd like to play w/ the story line to see what readers are interested in. Be on the lookout for two new stories, "New Moon" and "Five Bright Smiles". Both are non-consent. They are written, but I'm putting up "An Unorthodox Sales Contest" a chapter at a time and want to keep readers focused there before I start the new ones. Both of those two are considerably shorter. I expect to expand on both "Dinner Interrupted" and "All Night Cafe" when I get time.